Re: a comment on A Piñon Limb by Dovina	8-Jul-04/10:02 AM
So do I. How is that?
Re: a comment on A Piñon Limb by Dovina	8-Jul-04/10:01 AM
A paradelle satirist.
Re: a comment on A Piñon Limb by Dovina	7-Jul-04/1:24 PM
Thanks, and I'll look for a meter tweak.
Re: a comment on Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/5:57 PM
It's hard to answer from with this cloud of assumptions, like Galileo might have felt when asked about the sun's rising. I'm not anti-science, and think your outline is interesting.
Re: a comment on Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/5:22 PM
No, that wasn't it at all, but again, thank you. If you ever have a question on a subject that I have expounded as fully as you've expounded here, don't hesitate to ask, and I'll try to answer just as helpfully.
Re: a comment on Translation by Dovina	6-Jul-04/4:11 PM
You can't actually believe it's so mathematically simple?
Re: Back Slidin' by Quarton	6-Jul-04/2:06 PM
Back slidin' runnin' away, back slidin' comin' home. Good rhythm , a kinda' country feelin'
Re: a comment on Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/1:54 PM
You've been so helpful. Thank you so much!!!
Re: Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/1:23 PM
May I interrupt long enough to ask any of you science people a question? I’m fascinated with the news story that a tiny piece of dust has actually been observed in two places at the same time, a dice-throwing kind of outcome even Einstein feared. I’m trying to find the person who witnessed this so I can thank him or her. It explains some things I’d like to incorporate into a poem. Who was that?
Re: Bankruptcy (2) by INTRANSIT	6-Jul-04/12:56 PM
Run when the lions are lethargic. Good. I think you mean lions' shade.
Re: a comment on Homeless by gavinduff	6-Jul-04/11:40 AM
Speaking from Paris, a dubius distance from France, I agree that the last verse is a good stand-alone poem, but the first two stories don't match up, so commenting in general on the "poem" I'd have to say it's more of a line-broken story.
Re: a comment on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina	6-Jul-04/11:00 AM
A 10 is quite acceptable, considering that I did not yield to the temptation of breaking out, even in the slightest, from the constraint of paradelle, and have at least attempted to provide your burning ears with the utmost in poetic accomplishment.
Re: Urbane Jane by MacFrantic	6-Jul-04/10:53 AM
Better.
Re: a comment on Homeless by gavinduff	6-Jul-04/9:52 AM
Are we saying the same thing in divergent ways, or pushing toward different objectives?
Re: Homeless by gavinduff	6-Jul-04/9:26 AM
Some punctuation would help. The first verse tells us he is ignorant, then you show us. Better to just tell the story, I think. This is a bit like a story, broken up into lines.
Re: a comment on Rainbow by TwilightDawned	5-Jul-04/6:13 PM
Thank you.
Re: a comment on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina	5-Jul-04/4:59 PM
Thanks for illuminating darkness on a thing I thought single-minded, if not classy. Naive me.
Re: Forbidden by Chasz Misleading	5-Jul-04/3:24 PM
Good, especially verse 2.
Re: Graveyards by TwilightDawned	5-Jul-04/3:19 PM
"alive" at the end adds several variations Line 2: "that draws my vision" Good
Re: a comment on Rainbow by TwilightDawned	5-Jul-04/2:58 PM
Kites washing away sorrow. dimming in to the darkness