Re: Last Time by DevilBuni	26-Feb-05/6:58 AM
You must forgive INTRANSIT. He drives long hours in a semi on coffee. Don't get me wrong, his suggestions are good, and you'd do well to pay attention. But overall, you've got a good theme here.
Re: a comment on Hunger by Dovina	26-Feb-05/6:51 AM
You recently told someone that the 10 you gave him was the only sincere 10 you gave that day. Perhaps your comment flows from the same kind of reasoning that uses “your” as a contraction for “you are” because it’s “funny.” Or maybe it’s from the sort of logic that posits an implied proposition in this poem and than rents in vulgarities on the falsity of your straw man. Or the same kind of insight that claims world hunger as a an argument against what this poem is saying. Oh, guru of sensibility and logic, please teach on.
Re: a comment on It’s the Management by Dovina	26-Feb-05/6:38 AM
G'mornin' T-Driver. If your "Boss" comment above means that you think the boss in this pooem is a boss boss then you are the only one who thinks it means what I think it means.
Re: a comment on Jack and Jill by Dovina	26-Feb-05/6:31 AM
Friends anymore? My God, if that was friendship, what horrors lie ahead?
Re: Untitled by MacFrantic	25-Feb-05/6:59 AM
Line 2: sayest is singular, they plural. Line 3: use "thee" to stay with the old English. Line 4: the beat is off. Try morn delays. That's as far as I got. You've got the old (yawn)English voice alright.
Re: They that do not scream by INTRANSIT	24-Feb-05/1:04 PM
Yeah, good point. Ignore the screaming malcontents with their petty little gripes and open the window for the mantis.
Re: Invisible Wounds by Fearlesfan_04	24-Feb-05/8:36 AM
Okay you have wounds, but that's about all it says. Fancy spacing and repetition cannot make it better.
Re: The End of the Affair by jessicazee	24-Feb-05/8:34 AM
Scratch the first line. Line break after "teeth." I like this a lot!
Re: My word, her word, and yours by thepinkbunnyofdoom	24-Feb-05/8:19 AM
These coded interactions are interesting for riddle and bravery to risk discovery. Among the angst though are a few good lines - "Fact wrapped around fiction" because it's the opposite of the usual fiction wrapped around fact.
Re: a comment on Jack and Jill by Dovina	23-Feb-05/9:06 AM
To mystify.
Re: a comment on Jack and Jill by Dovina	23-Feb-05/7:02 AM
No, I didn't. But I don't see him as a Jack.
Re: dot.com by PodPoet	23-Feb-05/6:55 AM
Must you keep recycling this just to get it on top of the Recent List?
Re: a comment on Hunger by Dovina	23-Feb-05/6:51 AM
Callous is good. Dangerous is good. Perhaps "poorly conceived" should be "simply conceived." Grammar is bad only if you fail to see it in a circle. Serious is good Apparently, bad is good.
Re: a comment on Hunger by Dovina	23-Feb-05/6:49 AM
It's the pain you inflict there.
Re: a comment on Hunger by Dovina	23-Feb-05/6:45 AM
huh?
Re: a comment on Hunger by Dovina	23-Feb-05/6:41 AM
Oh, it achieves its simple idea, maybe not to your liking, but it achieves it, whatever arisions are.
Re: The Runaway by bamf909	22-Feb-05/8:07 PM
Yep. Done that. Not bad atol.
Re: a comment on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	22-Feb-05/3:52 PM
I think you need a hug.
Re: a comment on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	22-Feb-05/3:49 PM
They're both correct, but "layed" is less ambiguous.
Re: a comment on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	22-Feb-05/3:21 PM
And dare to delete and retaliate?