Re: As the Flowers Bloom by nothingtoanyone	7-Jun-05/5:30 PM
Are you a drone in love with a female worker. They have no interest in the likes of you as they bring home the nectar while you loaf about the hive.
Re: Haiku String of the Bee by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	7-Jun-05/2:31 PM
I think haiku is not the best form for this. And "love for queen" seems unlikely.
Re: Up Close at a Distance by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	7-Jun-05/2:27 PM
I like the mixture of emotions and the overiding passion. The ~ 's in ther first verse are a nice touch. Wish you'd used them in the second.
Re: he's leaving by eliznhaz	7-Jun-05/12:07 PM
Tender, but too close to the way I really think it will be. Give me imagery to cover my sorrow.
Re: Ice mask by Caducus	7-Jun-05/12:01 PM
The first three verses are good. Then it gets weird. The widow and the girl who died at 20 seem unrelated to the one you start with. "older than she"
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	7-Jun-05/11:50 AM
If he had simply admitted to posting a quote he remembers from youth and thought it was his own or some explanation like that, all could be forgiven. But when he deletes the poem, calling it a misunderstanding, I have to wonder if all his poems are copied from somewhere.
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	7-Jun-05/10:37 AM
What misunderstanding?
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	7-Jun-05/9:49 AM
I should have said it's a good story right up to the last few lines, where the irony attempt seems flawed. The prayer to the prophet and the "killers" line are not made clear.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	7-Jun-05/9:33 AM
No, only that more than one ball is inappropriate.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	7-Jun-05/9:31 AM
rain's mocking result
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	7-Jun-05/9:16 AM
Actually, I feel a need to be inferior, not superior as you say. Maybe you know that and figure its how a PSYCH or former slave thinks. My comments are usually attempts at clarification or simplification. I seldom mean them as trumps. Some are admittedly attempts at humor, like the one you are responding to.
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	6-Jun-05/8:28 PM
If I post a little programming segment and call it "Beak Flapping Flagellation," will you say I'm funny too.
Re: a comment on Always Forever by Princess_Snowflake	6-Jun-05/5:49 PM
Your comment appears as a reply to mine. That's the same as talking to me. If you want to address the poet, your comment should be placed in the comment box right under the poem.
Re: a comment on Always Forever by Princess_Snowflake	6-Jun-05/5:39 PM
o I see, "There's not one moment where I give a shit about you and your dear friend," was said calmly and smilingly. Forgiven, anyway.
Re: a comment on The world's shortest poem by ALChemy	6-Jun-05/5:37 PM
"Be cute." is better and shorter.
Re: a comment on Always Forever by Princess_Snowflake	6-Jun-05/5:33 PM
I believe you are shouting at Princess Snowflake while looking at me. At least I hope so.
Re: Dovecote by zodiac	6-Jun-05/3:14 PM
The prodigious punctuation is distracting. Shorter lines with half as many : " , etc., would be more readable. It rambles too much for "free verse." Prose poem maybe. Still, a good story.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	6-Jun-05/2:45 PM
The sun is rising, and although it will eventually descend and in so doing will appear to swell, the sun appears to shrink as it rises. Alliteration be dammed unless it fits the reality.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	6-Jun-05/2:45 PM
Although DoubleU called the sun “he,” for whatever reason, you should know from her shape that balls are inappropriate.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	6-Jun-05/2:44 PM
Summer has many answers to the extreme rains the mountains of Southern California have received this past winter. The answer I’m focusing on is the strong probability of wildfire. These mountains burn every 50 years on average, and this year, if a fire starts as the Santa Ana winds come hot and dry off the desert, the rain-swollen bushes will burn like a hell we have never seen. The last line is for comparison with the first verse, but it may be rubbing an obvious comparison into the readers face. I am so often accused of not including enough information, and being unclear, that I put it in just to be sure.