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Always Forever (Free verse) by Princess_Snowflake You'll be leaving
this place
where you've been
for almost a few years.
It is time to say goodbye
to the place you've been
and remember the times
like it was just yesterday.
Although when you're gone
we will be friends
always forever
and always
be keeping in touch.
It will be the time
when you look
for something that is new
that you might have
been dreaming of.
I'll be missing you
but we will always forever
be friends.
Up the ladder:
why you change?..
Down the ladder:
This rage
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: June 5, 2005 4:22 PM PDT; Last modified: June 5, 2005 4:22 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8102965 Overall Rank: 10962 Comments:
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How long is "always forever"?
This one contains a contradiction, and it's not >>always forever<<. The contradiction is in lines 12-13 and lines 15-16.
There is a poetic thought in this poem, but not one poetic line. There's not one moment where I give a shit about you and your dear friend. You wrote this to please yourself and did't give a shit about your readers. Hence my zero.
Forgiven, anyway.