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12-Sep-04/9:33 AM |
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You lose me on the last two lines. Before that I see a flood and a canal with a barge on it and wonder how a stonemason belongs here.
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| Re: Deep Sleep by Enchantres |
12-Sep-04/9:35 AM |
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What a perfect way to die. Nice.
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| Re: School 61 by unnesessary |
12-Sep-04/12:18 PM |
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I should vote 1 in retaliation, butI rather like this.
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12-Sep-04/3:04 PM |
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Permanently? Eyes caress his coat. Sad.
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12-Sep-04/3:07 PM |
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He won't change. They never do, dear. Take him as he is or not at all. I like the frustration I see in this poem.
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| Re: a goblet of divine wine brings me dreams by Prince of Void |
12-Sep-04/3:11 PM |
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Yea, I've felt like that, the haunting love of divinity, into the mystical world. Why is that? Good poem.
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| Re: Grandpa's boat by Caducus |
12-Sep-04/3:14 PM |
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| Re: Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco |
14-Sep-04/10:05 AM |
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Nothing left to do but blue collar bitching when all the debts are paid? I must be missing something.
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| Re: Princess by TLRufener |
15-Sep-04/4:29 PM |
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I wish I were a princess so I could at least have good food and be waited on. As it it is I just get all the guff this good poem mentions.
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15-Sep-04/4:36 PM |
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I so appreciate your kind attention to me and your appreciatin of my efforts to overcome great odds. This is most gratifying.
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15-Sep-04/4:40 PM |
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Live it up, girl. Fantasy may be the best part of love.
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| Re: Many Thanks by Dovina |
23-Sep-04/3:39 PM |
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23-Sep-04/3:45 PM |
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First verse is good. Last 2 lines of second verse falter some. Last line of poem might better refer to the first line. The seed was that first smile.
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23-Sep-04/4:25 PM |
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23-Sep-04/4:37 PM |
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Sessile was good, this leaves me cold. Sorry.
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| Re: Cassius by helenwales |
23-Sep-04/4:41 PM |
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Too vague, but I like the first and last lines.
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23-Sep-04/4:51 PM |
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It makes sense now, but I still don't see why the stonewoman trades in her tools.
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| Re: Middle of the Night by Sasha |
23-Sep-04/4:54 PM |
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I like this. It's unusual and right and nicely done.
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| Re: Bridesmaids in the Rain by wilco |
3-Oct-04/10:57 AM |
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It's the cahmpagne. Love and marriage - they seldom go together. Dream on and enjoy the slow dance at a wedding that isn't yours. Good thoughts
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| Re: Crushing Gingersnaps (beat) by INTRANSIT |
3-Oct-04/11:04 AM |
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You're getting all choppy on us, truckdriver, swerving all over the beaten path like a meverick mermaid's man in a mania. Is this a kind of second childhood? Not bad in a punk sort of way.
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