| Re: A Portrait of Antonio Machado (Edit) by Sasha |
3-Oct-04/11:13 AM |
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Your poetry comes from some "tranquil spring" and you are truly "good"???? I was about to criticize, but then I looked at my own reasons for this futility and find find them just as ridiculous.
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| Re: hauntingly sad beauty of death by Prince of Void |
3-Oct-04/11:36 AM |
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Some good thoughts here, but the title gives you away. I'd rather see a title that only hints. And some grammar glytches make it choppy.
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| Re: What is a poet by INTRANSIT |
4-Oct-04/5:30 AM |
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How do porcupines make love, particularly the hair-trigger kind? I ask because of this poisonous twitch. It's getting in the way.
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| Re: All At Last by nocturnalism |
4-Oct-04/5:33 AM |
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The country's not really all that bad. Some crap, yes. But some good stuff too.
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| Re: Big fanny by keatsImnot |
4-Oct-04/5:37 AM |
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Some good thoughts here, some bad grammar. I don't like the title. Either that or I did not get the connection.
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| Re: Better All The Time by wilco |
6-Oct-04/7:49 AM |
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At least you're off the marriage binge.
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6-Oct-04/8:00 AM |
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Except for the preaching in the last three lines, you have a good thing going.
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| Re: Confusion by berdabear |
6-Oct-04/8:02 AM |
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A mish-mash of uncontrolled thoughts.
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| Re: Death's Invitation by eliastemplar |
6-Oct-04/10:04 AM |
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I have a letter that might as well be around my neck reminding of a narrow escape, and in a bargain with the grim reaper, there's the stones of a crumbled foundation accross a wooded path. Thanks for the reminder.
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| Re: The Mortician: Scourge of the pen. by SupremeDreamer |
7-Oct-04/8:58 AM |
Some good thoughts here, especially that a mortician is there "to facilitate the apathetic-but-proper
disposal of the soul."
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| Re: DUKE BLOBBY;;;;; by MR Blobby |
7-Oct-04/9:09 AM |
There was a certain king
who had ten thousand men
He marched them up the hill one day
and marched them down again.
And when you're up, you're up
And when you're down, you're down
and when you're only half way up,
you're neither up n0or down.
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7-Oct-04/9:19 AM |
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I have to admire your keeping at this - third major revision if memory serves. Almost like Whitman kept at Leaves of Grass and probably shouldn't have. Still elusive. Meanings in murky canal water.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Oct-04/9:35 AM |
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I like "Buried bones in coloured spines." and, "immortalized on diseased elm . . . where fading names reside"
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| Re: Pop Quiz by steven adams |
8-Oct-04/10:14 AM |
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As Samantha, I ignore them. As Steven, I'd have to act macho with a joke.
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| Re: Dancing and Talking by steven adams |
8-Oct-04/10:18 AM |
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A really good thought you have here. It could be said stronger with fewer words though.
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11-Oct-04/7:46 PM |
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| Re: I Cannot Go by TLRufener |
11-Oct-04/7:59 PM |
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Not your best. Too many words. Good thought though.
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| Re: Life's Vision Altered by Katzclear |
12-Oct-04/11:00 AM |
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Try a spell checker. Some good thoughts here. Suicide is selfish and unkind!
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| Re: She Crab by http://mulberryfairy |
12-Oct-04/4:30 PM |
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A nice description of the crab, except for "too too solid flesh." I'm trying to see it as a metaphor. Wish I could.
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| Re: Locomotive's Graveyard by longships |
12-Oct-04/4:36 PM |
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I like this description and the "memories of those who once cared." Comma after reminiscing. Do pistons ever compress? Are coal holds really tinder cars? If so how do they stare?
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