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I Cannot Go (Free verse) by TLRufener
My eyes are closed once again Lying here, I wait for the end Breathing slowly in quiet motion I have not yet noticed the commotion The white door has come back Offering to replace all I lack As I carefully reach for the bright hue My thoughts are flooded with memories of you Your loving smile and gentle touch I will always know why I love you so much I think for a moment and then understand I am not ready for this life to end My heart still has so much love to give All I need is one more chance to live I cannot let go of my physical being At this moment I am all knowing and seeing The call has been made for me to go But I cannot deny how I love you so With these words unsaid and completely true I cannot leave until I have wholly loved you

Down the ladder: "Good Bye"

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1666665
Weighted score: 5.313765
Overall Rank: 3546
Posted: October 9, 2004 5:08 PM PDT; Last modified: October 9, 2004 5:08 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] cuddlytiger17 @ 209.105.136.21 | 9-Oct-04/7:47 PM | Reply
It started out alright, but then it got pretty corny.
[7] Dovina @ 24.52.156.155 | 11-Oct-04/7:59 PM | Reply
Not your best. Too many words. Good thought though.
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