Re: a comment on Nesting Instinct of Women by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	30-May-05/6:59 PM
Why should I balk when you say I am misguided or not guided? Am I not better off than a sheep? And if I could achieve horrific squelching more often, that would be nice too.
Re: Acrylic French Nails by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	30-May-05/6:48 PM
Subtle sarcasm...the tone is quite elegant, which is only fitting. I've had a few bashings over such subjects. Like, 'a woman should not poemise outward appearances or cosmetry hypes, let alone a man.' Well. I've done poems about two actresses who are quite diametric in this view: Maggie Smith and Cher. Maybe I'll let you read them one day.
Re: Aimee by LintyWeenis	Dovina 69.175.32.185	30-May-05/6:36 PM
Codependency perhaps, I say whatever works. A complex issue made clearer in just a few words.
Re: Nomad's Oasis by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.185	30-May-05/6:22 PM
Some good prose, but the theme is too far fetched to compel. What on earth do you mean by, "heaven is a mirage unreachable as a woman."
Re: Life and Love by windyone	Dovina 69.175.32.185	30-May-05/6:04 PM
Seems unfinished. Not that you should just tell us the outcome or the backstory, but some clue please.
Re: Distraction by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.185	30-May-05/6:00 PM
That's the problem. I'm still in a world of my own. Even with this sharing of a jumble of thoughts and the difficulties of sorting it out for writing, no gap is bridged, and it's still a jumble.
Re: a comment on Life and Love by windyone	windyone 63.245.189.142	30-May-05/4:30 PM
quite so..obviously an escapee
Re: Life and Love by windyone	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.21.227	30-May-05/4:20 PM
A brave turd, but ultimately doomed. Last words: "I'm going to make it!"
Re: I like to run by T.Becquerel II	Princess_Snowflake 4.158.12.210	30-May-05/3:56 PM
Makes me wanna laugh!
Re: a comment on A soldiers life by closeup	closeup 80.42.28.12	30-May-05/9:43 AM
Sorry this is not a fantastic poem, my first go at a poem really, i am 18 and studying war literature at school and it inspired me to write something, will have a better go next time.
Re: Distraction by zodiac	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	30-May-05/8:20 AM
Guffaw, guffaw. I like the form. I really do.
Re: a comment on The secret press by zodiac	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	30-May-05/8:17 AM
-It makes him expansive- made me think of an over-reaching mexican govt. But somehow that worked too. How do YOU feel about this piece?
Re: Nomad's Oasis by Caducus	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	30-May-05/8:17 AM
I like this and would have loved to see parts of it approached different: << where heaven is a mirage unreachable as a woman >> 'where heaven is a mirage as unreachable as a woman' the repeted 'as' is not elegant, but the sentence makes more sense this way. You could also opt for this: 'where heaven is like a woman, a mirage', The last stanza: In wandering through the afterlife she found him on the sands of New Mexico His tears had turned to jewels and jewels turned to tears when they made love on a grave in the shade of a headstone which read 'Eternal love for the dead'
Re: Micheal by Dreammaker1024	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	30-May-05/7:49 AM
Another female puppy, lapping at her master... As an attempt to write a whole new sort of poetry, this fails, to say it polite. It's an excerpt from a schoolgirl's diary and nothing more. The only poetic detail I could find was 'kiss/bliss'. Sopping in your panties can be a state of bliss, yes, but it's hardly a poetic one.
Re: a comment on Last Night by Roisin	zodiac 213.186.170.67	30-May-05/5:00 AM
Is the pulmonary system a cycle? Is a circuit? If he said 'circuit' instead, would it work better? Nobody's pointing out the real problems with this poem, so here goes: 1) it uses 'it's' for 'its'; 2) it's about suicide. Discuss.
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	zodiac 213.186.170.67	30-May-05/4:35 AM
I was on vacation with a weeklong bender. "Kinda cute in a sordid way" is kinda cute in a sordid way. But I bet if I met you in a bar, I'd stand a pretty good chance. Not that I want to, I'm just speaking hypothetically. PS-Saw a great poem about girlbees yesterday. Can't get it online, though. More to follow.
Re: a comment on The secret press by zodiac	zodiac 213.186.170.67	30-May-05/4:08 AM
Beta is a name. The name of a good friend of mine from Mexico days, actually. I'd like to say I meant something by it, but the truth is at the time I just couldn't think of any Spanish girls' names not overused in poetry. In my defense, I did mean something by "agitator", "wringer", "mangle" and "banner". That's got to be worth something, considering.
Re: a comment on The secret press by zodiac	zodiac 213.186.170.67	30-May-05/3:48 AM
Of course it's poetry. Consider the evidence: 1) The lines are much shorter than the space available. Sometimes, they're not even the same length. There are paragraph-breaks inserted at odd places. 2) "No" and "though" rhyme. "Agitator" and "Tlatelolco" almost do. 3) It's posted on a poetry website, with "Free Verse" written at the top. 4) People who come to poetry websites to read and vote on poetry are voting on it.
Re: a comment on Nesting Instinct of Women by Dovina	zodiac 213.186.170.67	30-May-05/3:37 AM
Of course it should be 'infinite', only. I was thinking that even Dovina would balk at someone interpreting her poems as "the horrific squelchings of a thoroughly misguided", making the number of possible correct interpretations infinity-minus-one. I see now how wrong I was.
Re: a comment on Lower than low by nicole081083	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	29-May-05/7:20 PM
But praying wasn't enough, right?