Re: Snow by lil_evil_boi	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	4-Jun-05/4:45 AM
'fuffy white' 'cold and frosty night' 'snowflakes' 'white layer' 'soft flakes' 'freshly fallen snow' 'frozen sky' Now let me guess...it's about WINTERTIME and SNOW? Yes, isn't it outragous that good poetry is so rare. Thank god for geniusses like lil_evil and hawaii_luver.
Re: lawngazing by skaskowski	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	4-Jun-05/4:22 AM
Good last stanza
Re: True Love by lil_evil_boi	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	4-Jun-05/4:20 AM
<< The love that is true, priceless and pure >> Now this is a nice subject for a poem. Why didn't you?
Re: Bunnies crazy inlove by kev_wannabe	some deleted user 24.69.255.205	3-Jun-05/10:12 PM
ooooo you make the bunnies soud like humans good...but i think it needs more creativity
Re: Soldier by kev_wannabe	some deleted user 24.69.255.205	3-Jun-05/10:12 PM
I think this poem is good^^ i lyk the way u gave them personalities
Re: a comment on Soldier by kev_wannabe	kev_wannabe 24.69.255.205	3-Jun-05/10:08 PM
sorry its not a cynical twist
Re: a comment on Soldier by kev_wannabe	kev_wannabe 24.69.255.205	3-Jun-05/10:06 PM
dull?? ok... well theres nothing much bout soldiers...cept fighting wars....rescueing others...so...ya.. y not u write one...lyk u can do ne betta^^
Re: Snow by lil_evil_boi	kev_wannabe 24.69.255.205	3-Jun-05/10:00 PM
ok...u cant actually smell the sweetness of the snow....and if ur trying to be "imaganitive" then its obvious not working...u shuld read more poems...and poems doesnt have to rhyme ^^
Re: Soldier by kev_wannabe	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	3-Jun-05/8:56 PM
I find this dull. You can do betta.
Re: Adibe's Song (third-time's-the-charm revision, less Spanish) by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/1:32 PM
Why is she in the men's residencia? Is she a she? The scarf implies so. Why is hermano not Hermano? Is a hacienda a residencia? Not ordinarily. Why are housewives in a men's residencia? Why capital Heaven, but not church? How does she know tomorrow's headlines? Last line is good.
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.204	3-Jun-05/12:41 PM
1 I disagree. And no, but I should be. 2 Ok. 3 Ok.
Re: a comment on Wanted by Dovina	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.204	3-Jun-05/12:35 PM
That just happened to be a by-product. Not intentional.
Re: a comment on Wanted by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/12:33 PM
Random wandering - sometimes. Specific wandering, like to poets related to rockmage - seldom.
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/12:11 PM
#1 I didn’t say, "he turns them outward" But I did say, “the man behind you takes your dangling hands, turns your thumbs outward, pulling, leaving no choice but to rest back on his chest.” Are you doing margaritas again? #2 I appreciate your concern, I really do, but how could it be chests with only one of me? And yes, it does refer back to “its dome a breast of his wife.” #3 I’ve mentioned Irish ancestry in other poems. Thanks for remembering.
Re: a comment on Soldier by kev_wannabe	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Jun-05/11:23 AM
Wha? It's not my poem. Yes America has a sullied past of treating its veterans poorly though I think we've corrected that. What we need to stop doing is sending them away in the first place.
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Jun-05/11:19 AM
To reply to the individual items. #1 You didn'g say "he turns them outward" It sounds like his thumbs are outward. #2 Breasts as in chests, Your being? Or re-referring to the domes' shape? #3Irish roman? Or am I unnecessarily crossing wires here? #4 and 5. Ok. Maybe I'm REALLY thick. still better off for the dialogue though, thanks.
Re: a comment on Wanted by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Jun-05/11:06 AM
Um, no,heh. I just wanted to point it out. I wasn't rying to relate it to this piece. Please tell me you wander the back rooms of p/r too.
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/10:50 AM
That depends on the angle between the bottom's plane and the horizontal.
Re: Soldier by kev_wannabe	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/10:44 AM
Trite.
Re: Structure of a Woman by al-naafiysh	Dovina 69.175.32.185	3-Jun-05/10:34 AM
But I think you do have fancy architecture. It's sad that being built to love and understand, we're often hating and misunderstanding.