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Bunnies crazy inlove (Free verse) by kev_wannabe
In a grass field, He was hopping around, Bouncing around, He ended up in a dandelion field, How peaceful it is. In a sunflower field, She was hopping around, Bouncing around, She ended up in a dandelion field, How beautiful it is. He hopped in rhythm, She hopped in beats, He was sniffing, She was styling, He had black fur, She had white fur, They both had red eyes, He ate cabbage, She ate carrots, He had long whiskers She had short ones. They were bouncing around until.... He saw her, She saw him, They gazed into each other's eyes, it was love at first sight. They sniffed each other, Hugged each other, Kissed each other, They were truly, crazy in love.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9087
Posted: June 2, 2005 9:58 PM PDT; Last modified: June 2, 2005 9:58 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] deleted user @ 24.69.255.205 | 3-Jun-05/10:12 PM | Reply
ooooo you make the bunnies soud like humans good...but i think it needs more creativity
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.92.49 | 4-Jun-05/8:38 AM | Reply
This is either a brilliant piece of sarcasm or a chocolate covered turd.
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.92.49 | 4-Jun-05/5:58 PM | Reply
It would make a good song though.
[9] sacred_poet_me @ 70.68.76.244 | 6-Jun-05/5:38 PM | Reply
WOW. You're good!
[1] deleted user @ 70.68.76.244 | 6-Jun-05/5:42 PM | Reply
My name does not fit with this poem. You should be ashamed of your failure. This piece does not run smoothly and I actually fell asleep while reading it (not exaggerating). It lacks interest and the repetition does not fit in this poem. Better luck next time!
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