darby pyn
replying on When the muse calls. by darby pyn
16 Jun 2005, 11:17 PM
I decided on inhibition. it just seemed to flow better
to my ear. I appreciate the spell check.
thanks again.
Thank you bankrupt. I will fix it and use your suggestion.
Agree.
Yes indeed. Very interesting...
Let me guess...a library?
as in bowls me over bowls
there should be an inhalation at the end of these lines.
and i miss reading your heart
Words are not meant to persuade
But to convey... perfect synthesis.
i like reading your mind
Facinating poems...
True. But you can stop by hating someone.
Merci.
I hear children's voices reading lines 12 through 14. I would hope that there are teachers in this country who might listen to their students as well as you seem to listen to yours. I admit that lines 7 through 11 are a bit off putting in that the images have already been overused in the daily media. But all in all, it seems to be an honest effort.
you are a deconstructionist, in a twist of taking down all that has fallen apart.
I have this giant black friend with a shlong like a python. He likes Perry Como music and (up)tight cunts, and wants to get in contact with you.
LA, Southern Cal. We have Summer that goes through January when it begins to rain and then Winter that pretends to find Spring in Apri but it's really only Summer with foggy mornings and hot afternoons.
Really? Cool. Where do you live?
By the way, you were outranked ages ago, by Popeye: I yam what I yam.
>>I am, unique.<<
Sigh.
That's as far as I came.
I really wonder why you bother with puncts and comma's and spaces.