Trite in places with a couple forced rhymes, but overall very expressive. I probably shouldn't have rated this since I tend to be a little harsh on love poems.

I think "BIG EGO" or "BIG PENIS" is implied somewhere. I almost missed the last line. I rated the poem high, but I like political and social work more than most people.

The first 4 verses were excellent. That's exactly the level of abstraction that best suits your style. You can often make a stronger point by allow the reader to think about where you may be coming from in your life with your writing than you do when you spell it out for them.

Most of the rhymes are forced and there are a few grammar issues. Elimate the metaphors that don't work and you might yet become an e e cummings.

hope you like this one,... another one of mine is "perfect place" plz rank that one too!!! thx

Blair Witched?

take you where?

no

Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.

you're spelling is awesome.

Dear diary, I feel so blue Engaged, for more than sixty years I love him still o yes I do I hide from him my flood of tears Smile every time he says, Quack cheese! *sob* Will Donald ever make my wish come true and fill me up with little duckies? (sneaky way to post 2 DoubleU poems within one hour)

The core consists actually of two lines: 'Will he go to the end of the world for her? Will he also do household chores for her?' No real problem to extend the message, but you could have used a bit more humor, more sarcasm. The last 4 lines add nothing.

Sounds like an over excited guinea pig humping its food bowl.

Smothered in kisses, the dramatic impact drowned in saliva.