Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:19 PM
Trite in places with a couple forced rhymes, but overall very expressive. I probably shouldn't have rated this since I tend to be a little harsh on love poems.
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:14 PM
I think "BIG EGO" or "BIG PENIS" is implied somewhere. I almost missed the last line. I rated the poem high, but I like political and social work more than most people.
Re: A scarce flower~ by clumseYdaiseY	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:09 PM
The first 4 verses were excellent. That's exactly the level of abstraction that best suits your style. You can often make a stronger point by allow the reader to think about where you may be coming from in your life with your writing than you do when you spell it out for them.
Re: i'm falling for u damnit! by clumseYdaiseY	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/8:58 PM
Most of the rhymes are forced and there are a few grammar issues. Elimate the metaphors that don't work and you might yet become an e e cummings.
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	gothiclovepoetiss 172.156.183.224	18-Jun-05/7:13 PM
hope you like this one,... another one of mine is "perfect place" plz rank that one too!!! thx
Re: It Could Be Worse by smiffy84	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:03 PM
Blair Witched?
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:02 PM
take you where?
Re: At The End by lil_evil_boi	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:00 PM
no
Re: This or That by sacred_poet_me	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:56 PM
Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.
Re: Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:53 PM
you're spelling is awesome.
Re: a comment on Feed The War Machine by smiffy84	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:47 PM
I still blame them for not understanding what training with a rifle ultimately means.
Re: a comment on Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/4:06 PM
The -4- is for both poems
Re: Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/4:05 PM
Dear diary, I feel so blue Engaged, for more than sixty years I love him still o yes I do I hide from him my flood of tears Smile every time he says, Quack cheese! *sob* Will Donald ever make my wish come true and fill me up with little duckies? (sneaky way to post 2 DoubleU poems within one hour)
Re: This or That by sacred_poet_me	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/3:36 PM
The core consists actually of two lines: 'Will he go to the end of the world for her? Will he also do household chores for her?' No real problem to extend the message, but you could have used a bit more humor, more sarcasm. The last 4 lines add nothing.
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	18-Jun-05/3:25 PM
Sounds like an over excited guinea pig humping its food bowl.
Re: a comment on Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	18-Jun-05/3:13 PM
Excuse me? It's "untamed_fierce" not "lil_evil_boi". Next time please check the person who you are accusing before you actually accuse them.
Re: a comment on Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	untamed_fierce 70.68.76.244	18-Jun-05/2:37 PM
Pardon me? These short poems are "plagiarized(said by zodiac)" by "untamed_fierce" not "lil_evil_boi". I believe there's a mistake.
Re: a comment on Sisyphus' wife by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/12:33 PM
That is precisely where I got those words... Miles Davis.
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/11:21 AM
Smothered in kisses, the dramatic impact drowned in saliva.
Re: a comment on Impeccable mess by sk8rs_rule_all	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/10:50 AM
Oh, I see at the end that is what you meant...but why should I spend time to dwell on what is obvious?