zodiac
on The Absense of God by Bluemonkey
3 Sep 2005, 4:25 AM
Also, not a haiku.
Where'd he go?
Um, because seasons and sunrises USUALLY stay? Forgive me if I think the problem's your expectation, not the sunrise.
Hmm, I guess you're right. With the music I put to it, I think it sounds more Death Cabish...probably because I've been listening to their new album...anyway, appreciate it.
Also, I hope that your family is okay. We have a lot of the "refugees" here in Memphis and they tell some wild stories about Nawlins.
Good memories. I'm guessing you meant to leave out the capitalizations and normally that would annoy me, but for some reason I think it's okay here.
It's funny how watching this business in New Orleans on TV is almost like a movie. You can't believe it's really happening. Funny thing is that if it were a movie, you'd be sitting there, watching it and thinking, "this shit would never happen in a million years".
This is really good. I don't mean to make assumptions on your influences, but this does actually sound like a lot of Wilco lyrics.
Hey you've been doing well while I was away.
Flight 2252, 757 heavy. You are cleared for take-off runway two-seven left.
I have a chapbook of Baudelaire, Some poems from Le Fleurs Du Mal. Already translated of course. Honestly, whenever I make a comment on your poems, I feel like a dope. Completely unknowledgable. Useless. I hate that. I really do.
Deeeeeeeee! please go for the beat and not the look.
....I wasn't winter-broken, though,
I thought that it would stay.
I hate using extra words too but the first three lines
hopscotch nicely.
I feel you dog, but keep working on this one.
Wow, this is the first really good poem I've read on here in a while. Godd job..it's good.
I've been known to give people zeroes for crappy poems..I'm just gonna give this one a 5 though because it did actually make me chuckle a little.
Nice...like a demented Dr. Seuss.
I plan on sticking around. I've been w/o an internet connection for about a year and have been using someone elses the few times I have been on.
But I know y'all missed me.
Longer than a minute, at least at the speed of my travels. Stay a microsecond or two. Thanks.