Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	2-Sep-05/12:27 PM
Flight 2252, 757 heavy. You are cleared for take-off runway two-seven left.
Re: Baudelaire: The Albatross by Sasha	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	2-Sep-05/12:22 PM
I have a chapbook of Baudelaire, Some poems from Le Fleurs Du Mal. Already translated of course. Honestly, whenever I make a comment on your poems, I feel like a dope. Completely unknowledgable. Useless. I hate that. I really do.
Re: First Love by Dovina	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	2-Sep-05/12:16 PM
Deeeeeeeee! please go for the beat and not the look. ....I wasn't winter-broken, though, I thought that it would stay. I hate using extra words too but the first three lines hopscotch nicely.
Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:55 AM
I feel you dog, but keep working on this one.
Re: Falling by D. $ Fontera	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:51 AM
Wow, this is the first really good poem I've read on here in a while. Godd job..it's good.
Re: a comment on Intrusion by Sasha	Sasha 68.49.8.49	2-Sep-05/11:45 AM
No, because "I tripped and saw...[it] creep,"
Re: I've often been known to make people laugh by T. Jonathron Remp	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:44 AM
I've been known to give people zeroes for crappy poems..I'm just gonna give this one a 5 though because it did actually make me chuckle a little.
Re: Stranger by MacFrantic	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:38 AM
Nice...like a demented Dr. Seuss.
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:36 AM
I plan on sticking around. I've been w/o an internet connection for about a year and have been using someone elses the few times I have been on. But I know y'all missed me.
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	Dovina 12.96.171.27	2-Sep-05/11:35 AM
Longer than a minute, at least at the speed of my travels. Stay a microsecond or two. Thanks.
Re: Prick by Enkidu	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:35 AM
Yep, completely fell apart. The first half is not bad and the second half is awful.
Re: First Love by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:29 AM
Short and sweet..one of your better in a while....well, that I've read...I've been gone for a minute....but I'm back now.
Re: Is This My Country? by PodPoet	wilco 66.61.101.130	2-Sep-05/11:21 AM
Although I find some of the ideas here to be without substance, you expressed your feelings in a way that's at least readable. Add punctuation throughout...especially in the 5th stanza.
Re: Katrina by jessicazee	Dovina 12.96.171.27	2-Sep-05/11:14 AM
Yeah, It does look like a galaxy from space. A comma after sink would clarify. A wet what?
Re: Falling by D. $ Fontera	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/11:06 AM
So true...and great way of saying it! ...In my life there is no such thing as 'destination'...only traveling, and pitstops and detours and sight-seeing - that way, no matter where I am, I am supposed to be there!
Re: Is This My Country? by PodPoet	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/10:58 AM
Very good...and so tragically true! Where was the aid to evacuate them to begin with, before it hit?! They left people there, like sitting disposable ducks! And the cost in lives, time, and the all-mighty dollar would have been far less had they sent in buses to evacuate EVERYONE who was not able to afford to leave. Now look at what it has and will cost!
Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/10:51 AM
Yeah...it needs more...far more.
Re: Baudelaire: The Albatross by Sasha	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/10:49 AM
That is why I am a flyer of the night...the currents are not crowded then, and under the shroud of midnight-blue clouds against the blackened sky I am better felt and sensed than seen with the eye. It makes for much higher flying...besides, the breezes are so FULL then that it vibrates through you. (Lovely, lovely piece!)
Re: I've often been known to make people laugh by T. Jonathron Remp	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/10:38 AM
Ha- HA! Excellent...One thing though.. at> "Twirl around and fondle your sister, And disappear before she knew what had hit her," ...it seems a little out of rhythm right there...perhaps?> "What'd hit 'er" to speed it up some?
Re: Stranger by MacFrantic	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67	2-Sep-05/10:32 AM
This is listed under 'Free Verse', but isn't it a form? Not that I would know all the technicalities of such things...just wondering. I don't care where you put it. Oh, and...isn't he just like everyone? I think so....