ALChemy
replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina
25 Nov 2005, 12:33 AM
I think your subject is a great one and you should work on this till you hit on something big. I want you to surprise me with things I've never heard from any woman. Tell me the thoughts of women 50 years from now. This is my challenge to you. If you meet it I'll give you a "You go girl" and declare women the superior sex.
A great poem about loss. I live in the north east and can identify with "the delicious sadness of fall." Good job!
Our grandmothers did those things, and some did them as well or better than modern women. But they were the special ones. I think the big change in the last twenty years is attitude. Maybe I didn’t say it well in the poem, but we can no longer rest in old expectations of frailty and excusable lack of integrity, but are expected to act professionally in our dress-for-success attire, and to work the project with constantly sensible demeanor. We like to say we accomplish this, but I’m asking whether success at it is too costly and whether a more feminine businesswoman is really more successful.
great poem.
here'a link to the Laibach version: http://media.putfile.com/Laibach57
hope it works
Sympathy for the Devil reference...nice..
thanks.
I wholeheartedly agree. This isn't even the best thing that I'VE written...much less the best thing on the site...of course that can be said for much of what's in the top 20. I think there needs to be a better system for determining the top peoms...oh well...what'r you gonna do..I don't run this outfit.
this shouldnt be # 1, not saying it should be last though. maybe # 10293.
It's the way of emotion, and emotion gets it's way. After "Due Consideration" (see my poem by that title) we decide by the seat of our pants or by what feels right. You've said it well.
I'll let it go then. But I think you've made some serious blunders.
Then all those outbursts of enflamatory exuberance were based solely in reason and only appeared that way to an unknowing observer.
Few decisions are based on reason - Dovina
How is that modern. My grandmother could do all those things and probably did and her lifestyle was never more modern than what you might see on The Waltons. Unfortunately you can't meet her because she died in the late 80s. Maybe change modern to free and you might have more of a statement.
The first stanza has nice rhythm.
It all makes sense what you say. Its hard to see what needs to change and others see it but seldom say it in a way that is clear.
I need to change without changing the good points.
Let me know with any future postings if you can.
I think I have the ideas and some are too big for my limited ability - I am not saying their i am crap but maybe my ideas are too vast for my talents.
Thats the gut reaction from your comment.
O Dear, not another one. When will these people realise.... I felt compelled to give this a low vote, firstly on the basis that it lulled me towards the position of wanting to vomit, but not enougth so as to stick two fingers down my throat. Secondly it uses the word love a hell of a lot, without saying anything about your feelings or this other person, and so feels somewhat less than loving and more like a manic fad; whether that is the intention or not.
Good Luck, theyre difficult to find, Ive been looking out for quite some time.
She doesn't hang out at the same places you do.
That has nothing to do with it. I will comment on your poems if you promise not to delete any more comments that aren't your own.
The prime example of trumping on poemranker is Mr Professor Doug Soderstrom, MA. He has never claimed to win anything, only trumped and hoped that in the resulting confusion we'd forget there was ever a discussion going on. I'm under no illusions about your desire to win. I hope that's settled.
1. Because if I do that, you say that most of what you've written/commented on poemranker doesn't reflect your real views or that it's too ambiguous to draw any real conclusion from. I'm not trying to dis; those are both excellent responses, but I'm trying to get somewhere. If you mean 'rather than just commenting on what I say, which is that I don't assume Christian God', well, because I think your a prime blunderer about those sort of things, and that people in general are not to be trusted to know their own minds.
2. Because the whole point of this argument is 'Oh, oh, shame on zodiac! He assumes God!' That is, shame on you Dovina for assuming not only God but Christian God, and then thinking it's some kind of dis to accuse others of that. Now you'll pretend the aboveposted comments and all of your other comments on this site are too vague for me to be drawing such conclusions. If that's the case, why the hell do you comment here? And do you ever suspect that you don't actually exist?
Despite your constant assertions to the contrary, you have always classified me and classify me at least as much as I classify you. Besides, I'm not the one who thinks classifying is some evil injustice; you're that one. At least half of the time. Disbelieve me if you like; these are the most obvious ways you've classified me on this page alone:
- God-assumer,
- Classifier,
- Likes to trump,
- Most cares about trumping,
- Will inevitably trump,
- Strongly-held believer.
So let it go.
I speak Arabic. All words stick in my throat. That's how we talk.
But no, I never ever feel like the voice of reason is acting at odds with my instinct or preexisting beliefs, so I need to ignore or abandon one of them to make things work. I think that would be a terrible way to live. I'm sure unreasoning people think mine is a terrible way to live, but then I seem a lot less bent out of shape than a lot of them.