Yeah I kinda just rushed through with the punctuation. Thank ya Lil Lady.

First...disclaimer:I have an affinity for the Celtic, but that said...I love this piece! And since I am in rare form tonight, I am suprised I took the time to pick around on this one and to let you know what bugged me alittle. (Feeling cynical and snide tonight...sorry.)I did give you a 9 on it, perhaps just 'cause you gave me something Celtic, with an olde feel to it, that so applies right now. Perhaps because nothing else piqued my interest tonight. Perhaps because it speaks from a time....never mind. Yeah, fix it up just a tweak, and I might just throw my first 10 out there! Filigree.(,)~ That, that will and that, that be.(,) Are dressed both in a fellow down.~ angry men.> I would change to better the rythm/flow right there.~ Plato(.)~ turned and runned> (an') would flow better and follow the language used. (runned? >and ran? to run?) Galveron(.) for we are so few (too few? we're?) large. (,) girthly span.(kinda awkward right there, interupted the flow. ?shorten it, change?)

? "as new graves, as a bombed field? I was loving this up to and after that...but I got lost there. What does that have to do with the rest? I could relate to this as one who keeps a 'food storage', well-stocked with provisions...and am driven to stock up on things I may need. This describes my large utility room full of such things, and the times when I had no bread, but I had plenty stored away, "in case". Winter rolls around and I am driven to start stock-piling. I related to the woman in this piece...but you refer to her as girlie (Girly), as if in put down. If one has ever truly gone hungry, then one probably can relate to such things and the need for self-sufficiency, and the little quirks one gains from that experience. Based on that long winded comment, think I'll give it a high score...I like the strange flow of it. For lack of better words, it just hits me good.(Except for the bit about graves and bombs, which I am still lost on...but I'm not breaking my own rule to see the comments before I vote and post!)

I never look at the votes or comments, but I would be suprised if anyone thought this mustered anything higher than my generous 3...sorry...it sucks in general, and really is lame, to be specific.

Lose the Macbeth reference, fill in the blank with something else;I don't see the relevance of it. I'd like to know what she said 'fine' to. Answer that, and replace Macbeth, and I might see my way to a higher score. I like the general flavour of it.

"Mahommed professed to derive from Heaven, and he has inserted in the Koran, not only a body of religious doctrines, but political maxims, civil and criminal laws, and theories of science. The gospel, on the contrary, only speaks of the general relations of men to God and to each other - beyond which it inculcates and imposes no point of faith. This alone, besides a thousand other reasons, would suffice to prove that the former of these religions will never long predominate in a cultivated and democratic age, whilst the latter is destined to retain its sway at these as at all other periods."

"Americans are so enamoured of equality they would rather be equal in slavery than unequal in freedom."

Yep, Just like my niece. Look at the first word of every line. Do you see anything monotonous?

The "letters / Of geese" is a weird line.

Change "mortally" to "mortem".

This is OK but many of your comments contain a more impressive use of language than this poem does.

So many good words given no use or meaning whatsoever.