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The Legend of the Crow (Free verse) by TLRufener
The clouds roll in, The sky darkens. Lightning strikes and the rain begins to fall. Through the booming thunder, A window smashes. Screams can be head throughout the city, Among the sirens in the streets below. Two lovers have fallen, Together they go on. A bridge stands before them, They walk together to the other side. Halfway the bridge falls, Shed crossed and he falls to the river below. He awakens in a cemetery, Before him he sees the horror of truth. Two stones, Marked with the names of separated lovers. Now he must do all he can, To make amends. He must rejoin, With his separated love. Alone he wonders, Why did he return without his love? If they both perished, How and why could that have happened? She come to him sometimes, Through the window where he fell. She explains, He must set things right about their deaths. If he does, He’ll be able to cross the bridge. If he does not, They will remain apart forever. The crow brought him back, It is the only link to his lost love.

Up the ladder: Why I Bother
Down the ladder: CityClub

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.3333333
Weighted score: 4.282823
Overall Rank: 13151
Posted: December 12, 2005 2:48 PM PST; Last modified: December 12, 2005 2:48 PM PST
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[4] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 | 12-Dec-05/3:40 PM | Reply
What are you doing? This is the legend of THE CROW. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0109506/

I'm sorry, I know I've given you crap about unoriginality in the past, but this seriously does not count as your own work.
[n/a] TLRufener @ 140.146.216.76 > zodiac | 12-Dec-05/4:37 PM | Reply
I'm sorry for borrowing a great idea. I wrote this about five years ago for a fanfiction site, and I just wanted opinions on the writing of it.
[3] LilMsLadyPoet @ 64.12.116.67 | 12-Dec-05/7:58 PM | Reply
I never look at the votes or comments, but I would be suprised if anyone thought this mustered anything higher than my generous 3...sorry...it sucks in general, and really is lame, to be specific.
[3] LilMsLadyPoet @ 64.12.116.138 > LilMsLadyPoet | 12-Dec-05/8:01 PM | Reply
Well, now I look, after I post...someone was either more generous than I, or more lame than you...and gave you a 4. I don't mean to be rude, truly. I just get tired of wading through pieces like this one, by the dozens, before I find something that qualifies as substantial brain food. I am in a rare mood tonight...(disclaimer)
[2] nentwined @ 64.60.192.131 | 13-Dec-05/4:50 PM | Reply
Reads like a tortured synopsis.
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