Re: a comment on Spanish Patio at Old Mission Inn by Dovina	Ranger 81.156.72.228	18-Oct-08/5:01 PM
My last post only notched up a measly 7 comments and half of them were probably mine. And as the whole point of poemeranker is to achieve the highest comment average in the entire universe I think posting again is a vain endeavour.
Re: a comment on Mountain Fever by Celticai	Ranger 81.156.72.228	18-Oct-08/4:56 PM
Then either it's not a very good poem, or we're not very good readers.
Re: a comment on definitely/maybe/mobius by malpaso	malpaso 70.233.157.100	16-Oct-08/10:05 AM
what do you mean?
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:32 PM
No one has actually commented on the intent of the poem. I've received many talking about the 'nature' of this poem - that it is about landscapes and one-ness with the earth. It was actually about seeking an orgasmic experience.. go figure.
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:30 PM
Thank you Nentwined... I suppose the my verbosity overflows into my poetry. I speak very much as I write - just like Regency Ladies - twittering mindlessly, repetitiously covering the same inadequate sayings endeavouring to get my point across. I appreciate all the comments I receive from others on this site.
Re: Words by Celticai	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:26 PM
I'm glad that people have found this poem difficult to read.. that was the purpose! lol It was supposed to demonstrate a process rather than a product.
Re: Opening Your Heart by chesty82	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:22 PM
Knowing a little of the situation that surrounds the writing of this poem, I'm moved greatly by this. Congratulations Chesty - I hope that the person it was intended for has read it!
Re: My love by chesty82	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:21 PM
I enjoyed this one! - especially the last verse!
Re: Inner Peace by chesty82	Celticai 123.211.253.133	15-Oct-08/10:20 PM
This gives me a sense of your internal struggle, Chesty.
Re: Dear God by chesty82	T. Jonathron Remp 128.62.139.122	15-Oct-08/5:18 PM
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Re: definitely/maybe/mobius by malpaso	T. Jonathron Remp 128.62.139.122	15-Oct-08/5:15 PM
racism
Re: definitely/maybe/mobius by malpaso	Bethy 165.154.46.215	15-Oct-08/2:29 PM
say you disagree...perhaps?
Re: a comment on Sleeping Beauty by celticskatermatt1	Bethy 165.154.46.215	15-Oct-08/2:22 PM
*you edit your
Re: Sleeping Beauty by celticskatermatt1	Bethy 165.154.46.215	15-Oct-08/2:20 PM
There is truly a poem here worth reading, however I do agree with Dovina on editing...it has lovely overtones which makes me want to give you an 8 for you beauitful thoughts...
Re: Him, again and again... by hobojo	Dovina 208.127.228.168	15-Oct-08/11:25 AM
a bit too wordy. example: For I truly had the best of intentions - can be something like: I meant well. I think "him" and "you" are the same person.
Re: Sleeping Beauty by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 208.127.228.168	15-Oct-08/11:19 AM
Clearly you love her, but clearly too cliched and unedited for posting. Cheers
Re: a comment on Spanish Patio at Old Mission Inn by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.228.168	15-Oct-08/11:16 AM
not true, but thanks :)
Re: a comment on Spanish Patio at Old Mission Inn by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.228.168	15-Oct-08/11:16 AM
I'd like to keep it light and unbiblical, but the experience, if I am to write true to it, was religious. Thus, grander temples fail, not fall, to match it. Dont know that song. Hey, post a poem for a change :)
Re: Words by Celticai	Dovina 208.127.228.168	15-Oct-08/11:06 AM
You seem groping for the perfect set of words. Much luck! Starting with a cliche is not a good start. "Desperate to portray my mind" is.
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	nentwined 76.89.158.49	14-Oct-08/7:12 PM
As someone else wrote on one of your poems--"get out of my head!" Feels very much like something I would have written ten years ago (though I never really went for staircases). That said, I find a lot of your words redundant (and in such a way as to render their compatriots less powerful). And the piece as a whole is missing some novelty, flow, or something to set it apart from a multitude of poems like it. Perhaps you can make it more personal?