Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/5:44 AM
I've got nothing to say that others haven't already said...this goes onto my favourites list...
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/5:10 AM
There's an anger that this doesn't quite release in its current form. I'd have liked to have seen it as prose, but I shall have to content myself with being sonneted about the face and neck. Vicious, nearly violent.
Re: The Heart of a Man by Queen of Tease	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/5:04 AM
Errm, is this meant to be serious? Not a bad poem, but I can't tell if you're having a laugh or not...
Re: In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:54 AM
Demon opener! Didn't get the last clause, but I'm a bit slow at the moment. The rest is a grand take on human failings.
Re: Tree of Life by ALChemy	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:48 AM
It makes me wish I'd seen such a scene in my life.
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:45 AM
Awesome stuff, I don't care if no vagrant owns a Labrador, to him I expect it was one. Wonderful poem.
Re: Oblivion by Sway	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:35 AM
Not bad, unoriginal though. You've evidently got the imagination to better this. Hint of the day: rhyming 'love' with 'above' (or 'dove') wil turn a lot of people off straight away.
Re: Him. by Sway	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:32 AM
Having read "You." before this one I thought they'd be parts of the same story...am I missing something obvious? Very angsty but a lot better done than most.
Re: Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:27 AM
I'm not convinced by the last section...the poem's more compelling when you're telling me your experience rather than overtly trying to convince me. Still worth a 7, I shall remember to check any edits of this piece.
Re: Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:23 AM
Another good idea from you, Master C - I do like DoubleU's suggestion, maybe make Alice be the cause of the other characters' fall from grace? Although having said that, the poem (as it is) gives a really nasty feeling of Alice's confusion, but I think that it's potential at the moment. With time it'll realise that potential. 7 for now, I will have another look at this later.
Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo	Ranger 62.252.32.15	28-Jan-06/4:15 AM
Yes, I like this.
Re: Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus	MacFrantic 172.141.224.222	28-Jan-06/2:07 AM
I enjoyed the idea *7*
Re: Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus	Glasseyez 204.49.132.46	28-Jan-06/1:16 AM
Why man this movie was awesome, how do you compare Alice in Wonderland where she was in a fantastical world full of wonderous things, to a sick wet dream straight out of the mind of Ted Bundy? I will give you a six though because I like your udder morbidness...Its refreshing
Re: a comment on A Book's Plight by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	27-Jan-06/6:21 PM
The poetry of scripture is more than enough. There's no 'rest'. Scripture itself is a library on its own.... there's romance and love, war, history, geography, secrets behind evolution, scientific secrets (building the ark), child psychology, etc..etc. I bet, there won't be room for more.
Re: a comment on Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	27-Jan-06/6:16 PM
About ne'er...maybe I should have written it ' I'll never forget'. I'll give you that. About the cross/ toss rhyme, I didn't force it. It flowed like that so I decided to keep it. It's for mainly what it means. When one's married, he/she knows what its like to be angry and cross, and see their marriage go for a sixer - a toss, and its hard to keep focus on what's actually brought both together. And about 'morrow - I liked it when I fitted it in, so I kept it. I'll agree, this piece could be modified like you've pointed out. I'll try doing what I can. Thanks.
Re: Untouchable by rahson_s	Alizarin_Crimson 71.131.189.202	27-Jan-06/5:53 PM
Nice. Consider putting "I am in love with my best friend's daughter" at the beginning, instead of the end. That grabs the reader's attention, and then the rest would make more sense.
Re: Memoirs of a Greasyslut the rest of the story by Glasseyez	zodiac 66.230.117.199	27-Jan-06/5:06 PM
How true! Geishas DO live in India!
Re: Memoirs of a Greasyslut the rest of the story by Glasseyez	ciantu 71.2.61.191	27-Jan-06/4:58 PM
I always wondered what happed to the other sister
Re: a comment on My testament to free speech by Glasseyez	zodiac 66.230.117.199	27-Jan-06/2:19 PM
Talk about modern day American, you misspelled testament.
Re: a comment on A Book's Plight by amanda_dcosta	ecargo 167.219.88.140	27-Jan-06/1:56 PM
The poetry of scripture, sure. The rest? Not really.