| Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
zodiac 209.193.9.218 |
6-Feb-06/7:31 AM |
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| Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
zodiac 209.193.9.218 |
6-Feb-06/7:30 AM |
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That's 5 syllables. What a shame.
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| Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
zodiac 209.193.9.218 |
6-Feb-06/7:30 AM |
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"We are like" doesn't mean any of those things, sorry.
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| Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
6-Feb-06/7:21 AM |
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What do you really think he's thinking?
I think he's thinking "bbrrbblbllgrrbbll-bloopploop".
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| Re: Tonight (edit) by drnick |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
6-Feb-06/7:18 AM |
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I love the ebb and flow of this poem!
'To such an extend thereâs no more left' - should that not be 'extent'? You use 'away' twice ('push you away' and 'stolen away'). I think it would be better to use another word in the second instance.
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| Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
6-Feb-06/7:13 AM |
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"We are like" - this is the part that says something interesting. Just as the goldfish do not see the origin of the raindrop, so we do not see the origin of events, only the ripples that they cause.
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| Re: Sonnet by zodiac |
ecargo 167.219.88.140 |
6-Feb-06/6:51 AM |
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Interesting approach, decent dismount.
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| Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
6-Feb-06/5:48 AM |
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Damn and I thought she meant something less profound.
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| Re: time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
richa 81.178.221.104 |
6-Feb-06/4:56 AM |
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goldfish contemplates raindrops
on an autumn pond. (13 syllables) I have saved you four syllables to say something interesting.
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| Re: time (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
richa 81.178.221.104 |
6-Feb-06/4:54 AM |
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Is this about how one of the dimensions of the universe is visible only to goldfish. If so I agree.
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| Re: a comment on can you sing me a song by richa |
richa 81.178.221.104 |
6-Feb-06/3:53 AM |
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Dovina :Why is it sad that the joyful reader cannot sing sweetest of all?
Richard: this is not a question for the narrator. He does not presume to explain the feelings of the joyful reader.
Dovina: To be a joyful reader is not wanton.
Richard: I did not pick the word at random. I picked it for its connotations of indiscipline and playfulness and the general sonic frivolity of the word.
Dovina: But I see no fault in that.
Richard: I am very pleased for you.
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| Re: Sonnet by zodiac |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/9:57 PM |
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Now this is poetry!! Congrats, you are my first 10. Well this poem is!!
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| Re: An Understanding Woman by Dovina |
zodiac 216.67.6.21 |
5-Feb-06/8:54 PM |
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This is an exact description of tonight's "Grey's Anatomy".
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| Re: I'm there by amanda_dcosta |
zodiac 216.67.6.21 |
5-Feb-06/8:53 PM |
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| Re: a comment on I'm there by amanda_dcosta |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44 |
5-Feb-06/7:51 PM |
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How would I know that others haven't borrowed lines?
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| Re: Horatio by april fool |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/7:29 PM |
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| Re: Count All the Stars by TLRufener |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/7:27 PM |
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I liked it. A bit elementary but still good.
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| Re: Even the elephants by ecargo |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/7:24 PM |
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| Re: Goldenshoes Shane by dantron |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/7:15 PM |
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| Re: Cold-Blooded Pillow by drnick |
Angelicasassy 72.40.4.69 |
5-Feb-06/7:08 PM |
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