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Cold-Blooded Pillow (Free verse) by drnick This whole life
I've
Been trained to leave you alive
Yet tonight
I feel
Colder than sharpened steel
You could end
My keen
Murderous motions in morphine
Stare in my
Irenic eyes
For a moment we can improvise
Light up this
Candlewick garden
That leaves killers for pardon
Inevibility arrives
I sigh
An existential lullaby
As we lay
I dream
Never to awake my criminal scheme
Never to awake...
when long overdue
Never to awake...
before you
Up the ladder:
Face of Iran
Down the ladder:
The End
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Posted: January 19, 2006 9:20 PM PST; Last modified: January 19, 2006 9:20 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.976287 Overall Rank: 8284 Comments:
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drnick @ 24.176.22.254
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19-Jan-06/9:22 PM
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This was called "Sleeping with the Enemy," however due to recent complaints I found that this was also the title to some piece of shit movie and thus could not use it. After hours upon hours of Trial and Error(also the title to a movie) I came up with this, I hope you like it.
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zodiac @ 209.193.14.236
> drnick
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19-Jan-06/11:16 PM
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What are you talking about? The cans are all lined up in the cabinet! The hand towels are orderly! LAUUURAAAAAAA! LAUUUURAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!1!
Do you mean "Inevitability"?
Is this poem supposed to make you sound like some kind of bad-ass or supreme evil doer?
Yes, I do...probably should use spell-check or something, huh?
No, I don't think you quite understand where I'm coming from with this poem. I'm saying that sometimes it's hard to commit an ill-conceived act against someone whom you love; a mere look or touch is enough to forget why you were angry and fall back into the adoring state you were in before. I never try to sound like some kind of bad-ass or supreme evil doer but perhaps that is "inevitable."
Yeah but would you sleep with someone who thought of you like that? It just comes across a little on the psycho side which is fine if you really mean it. I just think you went a little too far with it. Your other stuff is better.
Yeah, this is way too scary. I hope you mean it some metaphorical way and not the way it sounds.
ya, you guys are taking it way too literally...but I'm sure that's my fault for writing it poorly.
wow, I like this.
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