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Cold-Blooded Pillow

by drnick

Member since 2005 · Posted 19 Jan 2006 · 8 comments

This whole life I've Been trained to leave you alive Yet tonight I feel Colder than sharpened steel You could end My keen Murderous motions in morphine Stare in my Irenic eyes For a moment we can improvise Light up this Candlewick garden That leaves killers for pardon Inevibility arrives I sigh An existential lullaby As we lay I dream Never to awake my criminal scheme Never to awake... when long overdue Never to awake... before you

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[n/a] drnick 19-Jan-06/9:22 PM Reply
This was called "Sleeping with the Enemy," however due to recent complaints I found that this was also the title to some piece of shit movie and thus could not use it. After hours upon hours of Trial and Error(also the title to a movie) I came up with this, I hope you like it.
[n/a] zodiac › drnick 19-Jan-06/11:16 PM Reply
What are you talking about? The cans are all lined up in the cabinet! The hand towels are orderly! LAUUURAAAAAAA! LAUUUURAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!1!
[n/a] ALChemy 20-Jan-06/12:24 AM Reply
Do you mean "Inevitability"?
Is this poem supposed to make you sound like some kind of bad-ass or supreme evil doer?
[n/a] drnick › ALChemy 20-Jan-06/11:23 AM Reply
Yes, I do...probably should use spell-check or something, huh?

No, I don't think you quite understand where I'm coming from with this poem. I'm saying that sometimes it's hard to commit an ill-conceived act against someone whom you love; a mere look or touch is enough to forget why you were angry and fall back into the adoring state you were in before. I never try to sound like some kind of bad-ass or supreme evil doer but perhaps that is "inevitable."
[n/a] ALChemy › drnick 20-Jan-06/11:57 AM Reply
Yeah but would you sleep with someone who thought of you like that? It just comes across a little on the psycho side which is fine if you really mean it. I just think you went a little too far with it. Your other stuff is better.
[n/a] Dovina › drnick 20-Jan-06/2:05 PM Reply
Yeah, this is way too scary. I hope you mean it some metaphorical way and not the way it sounds.
[n/a] drnick › Dovina 21-Jan-06/12:20 PM Reply
ya, you guys are taking it way too literally...but I'm sure that's my fault for writing it poorly.
[9] Angelicasassy 5-Feb-06/7:08 PM Reply
wow, I like this.