Re: Valentine by zodiac	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	13-Feb-06/10:11 AM
Zodiac, truthfully, I didn't connect well with the poem......it's not a topic that has picked my interest.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	13-Feb-06/9:52 AM
Thanks a ton for your review "jesus". Looks like you have been doing a study on circumcision. Keep up the good work.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	13-Feb-06/9:37 AM
Yeah zodiac, I think that sounds better. when one has a lot of ideas, nothing seems to fit in well, rather a confused state. Seems clearer now. Thanks for the review. Well appreciated.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	13-Feb-06/8:57 AM
Deuteronomy 22:28-29: "When a man comes upon a virgin who has never been engaged and grabs and rapes her and they are found out, the man who raped her has to give her father fifty pieces of silver. He has to marry her because he took advantage of her. And he can never divorce her."
Re: A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	some deleted user 195.157.153.249	13-Feb-06/8:54 AM
Genesis 17:12 Every male baby will be circumcised when he is eight days old, generation after generation--this includes house-born slaves and slaves bought from outsiders who are not blood kin. Genesis 17:23 Then Abraham took his son Ishmael and all his servants, whether houseborn or purchased--every male in his household--and circumcised them, cutting off their foreskins that very day, just as God had told him. Genesis 17:24 Abraham was ninety-nine years old when he was circumcised. Genesis 17:25 His son Ishmael was thirteen years old when he was circumcised. Genesis 17:26 Abraham and Ishmael were circumcised the same day Genesis 21:4 When his son was eight days old, Abraham circumcised him just as God had commanded. Genesis 34:15 The only condition on which we can talk business is if all your men become circumcised like us. Genesis 34:22 But these men will only accept our invitation to live with us and become one big family on one condition, that all our males become circumcised just as they themselves are. Genesis 34:24 Everyone who was anyone in the city agreed with Hamor and his son, Shechem; every male was circumcised. Exodus 12:48 If an immigrant is staying with you and wants to keep the Passover to GOD, every male in his family must be circumcised, then he can participate in the Meal--he will then be treated as a native son. But no uncircumcised person can eat it. Joshua 5:3 So Joshua made stone knives and circumcised the People of Israel at Foreskins Hill. Joshua 5:5 All the people who had come out of Egypt, of course, had been circumcised, but all those born in the wilderness along the way since leaving Egypt had not been. Joshua 5:7 But their children had replaced them. These are the ones Joshua circumcised. They had never been circumcised; no one had circumcised them along the way. Acts 15:1 It wasn't long before some Jews showed up from Judea insisting that everyone be circumcised: "If you're not circumcised in the Mosaic fashion, you can't be saved." Acts 16:3 Paul wanted to recruit him for their mission, but first took him aside and circumcised him so he wouldn't offend the Jews who lived in those parts. They all knew that his father was Greek. Romans 2:25 Circumcision, the surgical ritual that marks you as a Jew, is great if you live in accord with God's law. But if you don't, it's worse than not being circumcised. Romans 2:26 The reverse is also true: The uncircumcised who keep God's ways are as good as the circumcised-- Romans 2:27 in fact, better. Better to keep God's law uncircumcised than break it circumcised. Romans 4:9 Do you think for a minute that this blessing is only pronounced over those of us who keep our religious ways and are circumcised? Or do you think it possible that the blessing could be given to those who never even heard of our ways, who were never brought up in the disciplines of God? We all agree, don't we, that it was by embracing what God did for him that Abraham was declared fit before God? Galatians 2:3 Significantly, Titus, non-Jewish though he was, was not required to be circumcised. Galatians 6:13 They themselves don't keep the law! And they are highly selective in the laws they do observe. They only want you to be circumcised so they can boast of their success in recruiting you to their side. That is contemptible! Philippians 3:5 a legitimate birth, circumcised on the eighth day; an Israelite from the elite tribe of Benjamin; a strict and devout adherent to God's law; Colossians 2:11 Entering into this fullness is not something you figure out or achieve. It's not a matter of being circumcised or keeping a long list of laws. No, you're already in--insiders-not through some secretive initiation rite but rather through what Christ has already gone through for you, destroying the power of sin.
Re: skaskowski is totally gay by some deleted user	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	13-Feb-06/8:44 AM
A good, simple rhyme scheme, with a deft and poignant interweaving of harrowing social commentary. Well done!
Re: hendrimike is totally gay by wzodlacw	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	13-Feb-06/8:41 AM
A thoughtful and well considered piece. Well done!
Re: Glasseyez is totally gay by w-=Dark_Angel=-,_P.I.w	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	13-Feb-06/8:41 AM
A thought-provoking treatment of a sensitive issue. Well done!
Re: hendrimike is totally gay by wzodlacw	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Feb-06/8:36 AM
Totally gay!
Re: a comment on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Feb-06/8:01 AM
Fraser's legs are now dso big he has dispensed with trousers safe in the knowledge that he is so fat no one will ever be able to guess he has genitals. There once was a barrister so fat, He left destruction whe're he sat, His cock disappeared, And it was feared, That he'd grown a fat twat.
Re: a comment on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	zodiac 209.193.9.236	13-Feb-06/7:50 AM
Oh. Fraser didn't come off so well in that whole contest, then, did he? That's going to be hard on him, coming as it does after his legs' girth finally making it impossible for him to walk frontwards through doors, as we've all long predicted.
Re: patty t is totally gay by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Feb-06/6:25 AM
clever. + true.
Re: a comment on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Feb-06/6:20 AM
1 b is actually me. Fucker.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Feb-06/6:06 AM
I bearded my negro with a breast, And entered him in a beauty contest, But the boobies were pale, And looked wrong on a male, He went down a storm in the Mid West! I bearded my Jesus in the Koran, And bade him march on Xian, But the city in China, Gave our Negro a shiner, Thereby abandoning our rapprochement!
Re: a comment on Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	zodiac 66.230.117.3	12-Feb-06/9:38 PM
My opinion isn't overrated. It's certified "Excellent" by a panel of nine international judges, highest and lowest dropped. Consider instead that you're acting like a child because someone didn't tell you what a godawful genius you are. Well - now that your ego's down to size, let's consider one of your so-called paradoxes: "We have taller buildings, but shorter tempers". This is not technically a paradox, as there's no understood or expressed connection between building-height and temper. Indeed, the opposite could be said to be true: everyone knows that walking up tall buildings makes you angry, while Aboriginals are perfectly happy in their mud hovels. But perhaps you meant "People expend a lot of energy working for something that's not an expressed priority (i.e., taller buildings), while not working very hard for something that is an expressed priority (more patience and understanding)." Well, for one, why didn't you - or whoever made that email forward list of "paradoxes of our times" - say so? And for two, it's not true. This is a time of longer tempers, as is proven by anything more than a passing glance at history. Looking through the rest of your list, I see most of those "paradoxes" fall into one or more of the following categories: (1) not technically paradoxical, (2) not true, and (3) folk pithiness; something that sounds clever to people like you because it uses "opposite words" - short/long, quick/slow, etc. - but on cursory examination deflates like guff souffle. Inasmuch as (3) is true, this should be the most profound thing you've ever heard: I am smart, but you are foolish. In short, you are not going to be able to out-sense me, neither here nor in the Thunderdome of your choice. Your "moonlight paradox" presents no paradox. Anywhere. In addition, it's misspelled, mispunctuated, rambling, focusless, and overloaded with words that, by universal agreement, should never be used in poetry again. If it helps, you can go zero all my poems now. On your way out, please considering reading some actual modern poetry somewhere. It's been swell.
Re: a comment on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	12-Feb-06/9:32 PM
Yeah, it does kinda remind me of her stuff.
Re: a comment on Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	Glasseyez 204.49.132.53	12-Feb-06/7:52 PM
Ah zodiac, your opinion is over rated, one of bleak understanding and simple mindedness, I write usually to prove a point not to create a masterpiece. The definition of a paradox. 1. a statement that seems contradictory, absurd, etc. but may be true in fact. Here are some "paradoxes of our times" We have taller buildings, but shorter tempers; wider freeways, but narrower viewpoints; we spend more, but have less; we buy more, but enjoy it less. We have bigger houses and smaller families; more conveniences, but less time; we have more degrees, but less common sense; more knowledge, but less judgment; more experts, but more problems; more medicine, but less wellness. We spend too recklessly, laugh too little, drive too fast, get too angry too quickly, stay up too late, get up too tired, read too seldom, watch TV too much, and pray too seldom. We have multiplied our possessions, but reduced our values. We talk too much, love too seldom and lie too often. We've learned how to make a living, but not a life; we've added years to life, not life to years. We build more computers to hold more information, to produce more copies than ever, but have less communication; we've become long on quantity, but short on quality. We've been all the way to the moon and back, but have trouble crossing the street to meet the new neighbor. We've conquered outer space, but not inner space; we've done larger things, but not better things; we've cleaned up the air, but polluted the soul; we've split the atom, but not our prejudice; we write more, but learn less; plan more, but accomplish less. We've learned to rush, but not to wait; we have higher incomes; but lower morals; more food but less appeasement; more acquaintances, but fewer friends; more effort but less success. These are the time of fast foods and slow digestion; tall men and short character; steep profits, and shallow relationships. These are the times of world peace, but domestic warfare; more leisure and less fun; more kinds of food, but less nutrition. These are days of two incomes, but more divorce; of fancier houses, but broken homes. These are days of quick trips, disposable diapers, throwaway morality, one-night stands, overweight bodies, and pills that do everything from cheer, to quiet, to kill. It is a time when there is much in the show window, and nothing in the stockroom. Indeed it's all true. Think about it...read it again.
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	zodiac 66.230.117.3	12-Feb-06/4:06 PM
How Dovina. Sorry I didn't comment earlier. I simply can't think of what else to say.
Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	zodiac 66.230.117.3	12-Feb-06/1:21 PM
You get better and better.
Re: Monkey Tree (Breathless edit) by ecargo	zodiac 66.230.117.3	12-Feb-06/1:19 PM
"Bower" is a bad word choice. I think this is one of the few times where wild indentation helps the poem. Good one.