Re: a comment on Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	Glasseyez 204.49.132.21	13-Feb-06/3:32 PM
The paradox is in that it IS pointless from a glance, but I wrote it so that I could reveal that so is every other religious doctrine. It is supposed to get you thinking, its next to impossible to get everything I explained, out of this alone. The Moonlight Paradox was never supposed to be about a Paradox, thus the Paradox, its unexpected. Like the Parables and stories in the bible were never supposed to be about planting a field or eating a forbidden apple. That is really all I meant to point out. We all DO have a purpose in life, just as the 2nd stanza being wrote frontways and backways in this poem had a purpose. For you I guess in was just to piss you off, but it was supposed to symbolize a balance. That email chain was horribly written, yes, but it did point out the irony of today, some were not all true but I did'nt feel the need to waste my time correcting the mistakes. Paradoxes are real but they aren't magic, you are correct. It is just an event. Ok but how easy is it to point out something is false? Why not try to point out what is true and bring it to peoples attention? It all seems more productive to me. So you might not have liked it but do not dismiss it as rubbish and post it as a comment saying how horrible you thought it was and that your opinion is gold, vote and forget it, someone may find meaning to it, that is all I want. To be honest I could care less if you're the smartest man/ woman to hit this century, good for you, want a cookie? Give me your adress I will send you a box of them, so long as you keep the pessimistic comments to yourself. If you wanted to judge my grammer usage, punctuation, or wording fine. But if you don't understand something "ask don't tell". I happen to like your work, hopefully one day I can write as good as you. Just started making mine public and do not have a hell of alot of experience. But I do read, and I do love it. Nice talking to you.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	ecargo 63.22.76.26	13-Feb-06/2:49 PM
Well, I've seen a couple of movies about the V-Day Massacre and read a couple of books about Capone, so I knew the rough details (gangland killing, phony cops). I almost certainly couldn't have placed Gusenberg's name without any context, though. You gave enough information (title, reference, details) to make it easy to find out the details, so I did what I usually do--I Googled it. That's how I knew about the "blond alibi" and that Gusenberg was known as "Tight Lips." Easy enough to find out.
Re: Glasseyez is totally gay by w-=Dark_Angel=-,_P.I.w	Glasseyez 204.49.132.21	13-Feb-06/2:33 PM
Who am I to argue with someone who has rhymed about shit, cocks, and cum for as long as they have been on this site?
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	zodiac 209.193.9.236	13-Feb-06/2:27 PM
Oh. I was talking about new porn, obviously. Here's a question for you and ecargo: How well-known is Gusenberg/The V-Day Massacre, anyway? How do you know about him? I have no idea what other people know about.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	zodiac 209.193.9.236	13-Feb-06/2:12 PM
I'm glad the alibi girl came through.
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	ecargo 63.22.7.214	13-Feb-06/2:09 PM
Some nice lines, Ranger, but not hanging together quite yet. Some images don't stand close scrutiny ("deftly flowed"; "volcano ripple in reverse"? "idol of adultery"--what's the story there? snaking flies, pregnant flame). I do like the sound of this and some images like a hem waltzing drunkenly, but it needs some tweaking.
Re: discovery by skaskowski	ecargo 63.22.7.214	13-Feb-06/2:01 PM
What's this? ACME (TM) Poem-o-matic? Input words and it spits out a "poem"? first line could lead to something interesting--but this ain't it.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	ecargo 63.22.7.214	13-Feb-06/1:59 PM
Ace. What's not to like: old Tight Lips (the mug), a good tale well told. Glad you resisted the temptation of too much "tough guy" speak, the suggestion of it's just enough. This gets a little convoluted: "And lacking even the dignity or indignity of bringing a shivering pile of guts clutched-in already cooling to you is enough without these kids who even as I die make me their hope, their trick, their crash averted." Love the "and already wandering . . ."; the ("blond alibi?") dame's essential to the noir. Killer.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/1:48 PM
Masters at pop music. The good kind.
Re: discovery by skaskowski	Dovina 69.175.32.104	13-Feb-06/1:44 PM
unintelligible!
Re: A Soldiers Story by Glasseyez	Dovina 69.175.32.104	13-Feb-06/1:42 PM
Not bad as a poem, but I think you could write it better as a story.
Re: skaskowski is totally gay by some deleted user	Dovina 69.175.32.104	13-Feb-06/1:36 PM
At least it's not about me.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	zodiac 209.193.9.236	13-Feb-06/1:27 PM
You know, I actually don't know the New Pornographers except by name. If they are who I think they are, though, I like their work.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/1:04 PM
You're Carl newman from the New Pornographers aren't you..
Re: Panic Slide by MacFrantic	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/12:57 PM
I'd like to see this formed into a more cohesive...um..thing..
Re: Unless Redux by rahson_s	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/12:50 PM
I've seen you do better, but not bad. I think, though, if you're going to throw out the racial slurs, just go ahead and say niggers. "Niggas" makes it seem like you're trying to skirt the issue and use slang instead.
Re: a waste of time by hendrimike	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/12:47 PM
Doesn't really say much as a whole that couldn't have been said in one verse. Mybe that's the point...hey, it's a mainstream pop song!
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	13-Feb-06/12:40 PM
Thanks, I'm hoping I can keep that trend going with the actual music as well.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	13-Feb-06/10:40 AM
Mc.Frantic, this is pretty good. But, I would also rather prefer a definite rhythm. Would enhance the beauty of what you've pictured.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 62.252.32.15	13-Feb-06/10:24 AM
What the cheese? That was possibly the meatiest comment I've ever seen. Anyway, I really like the story in this poem, Amanda, but I have to agree with zodiac in regard to the layout. The first line is an excellent catch for the reader!