Re: a comment on Teaching Beetles To Swim by Bobjim	Bobjim 84.9.177.58	15-Feb-06/6:50 AM
As with all my poems, it's mine unless and until someone points out that it isn't.
Re: Tuna and sweetcorn by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:48 AM
Aha! Very good, sir, very good!
Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:46 AM
drnick, you are a privileged soul! Glorious!
Re: Teaching Beetles To Swim by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:44 AM
Is this yours?
Re: a comment on Down on Dogs by Bobjim	Bobjim 84.9.177.58	15-Feb-06/6:43 AM
You peraps haven't noticed the comment a few inches up that makes mention of my plagiarising.
Re: To Bob, Love Ed by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:42 AM
Bob, you're so fine. Really.
Re: a comment on Down on Dogs by Bobjim	Bobjim 84.9.177.58	15-Feb-06/6:42 AM
You perhaps haven't noticed, but this is a really old poem. I'm not trying to do anything with it.
Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	15-Feb-06/6:40 AM
For those of you who wonder why such a poem is ever written...... check out my previous poem. drnick... you're now famous.
Re: Yet another Morning Glory piss-take by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:38 AM
Another Orange reason (parodying another user). But it made me laugh so much...
Re: Down on Dogs by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/6:36 AM
BJ, you're desperate to get that Orange Award back, aren't you?
Re: change (3rd draft) by Adriaan	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Feb-06/6:17 AM
Good but you could have put more imagery in the second verse. Something like- Hermit sits: Child's name carved in bark Red leaves fall. Not that that's where you were going but you see what I mean?
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Feb-06/5:59 AM
There is no pattern really. It's kinda like dancing. You hear the rhythm and melody in your head and you just go with it. Moves just come out of you and they lead into other moves and so on. It's like that but with words instead of dance moves.
Re: a comment on Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Feb-06/5:49 AM
I think the site explains more about how it was done but I think you'll come to the conclusion that this is still quite remarkable, even wonderful.
Re: a comment on Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Feb-06/5:44 AM
It's about loving a girl that I know is someone elses. Hence the hot/cold and other juxtapositions. What I feel is one thing, what is real is another. Although I've never felt "swarming buGGles" when I was with a woman I certainly do look forward to it some day :) The poem sounds so passionate but in reality it's quite sad, that's the big let down I think. There's probably alot of men out there who missed the boat with you feeling like this poem and you don't even know it, you little heartbreaker you.
Re: a comment on Valentine 2 by zodiac	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Feb-06/5:20 AM
I see what you mean. I've always thought there was a connection between kissing and canabalism. Maybe that could tie it all in for you. Maybe let the narrator give the last lines as questions as if he himself cannot imagine how they can eat their gods. I think it's just hard to see the history behind the story unless you know about the original story first and so it loses some of it's impact for those who don't know the history. With a little research I'm sure I'll be able to appreciate the poem alot more.
Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Feb-06/1:52 AM
I'm not sure why but having 'red leaves' makes it seem more Japanese, more authentic in a way. Trying to create a solid image in 11 syllables is a pretty daunting task and you pull it off really well; not only that but the title is simple and highly appropriate for the form. All round I can't find fault with this at all - it seems like the sort of poem that needs to be laboriously handwritten onto woven tapestry to have full effect...the poemranker font just doesn't quite do it! Change (5-7-5) by Ranger White-haired hermit sits Same rocky seat, but new view Watch red leaf ballet I had to write that to compare the two and I was right; expanding your one would have been detrimental to the idea of change within it. To be honest, I think that yours is as good as it's possible to get with this format. Good work!
Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan	Adriaan 198.54.202.18	15-Feb-06/1:06 AM
Thanks for your comment... it was meant to be 3-5-3 haiku. There is a debate in the haiku world about 5-7-5 (true to the sylabic count of Japanses haiku) vs. 3-5-3 (supposedly truer to the informational content of Japanese haiku). I thought I'd try the more restrictive form. Please comment on the change - I added an adjective :)
Re: a comment on Escape by raven_the_poet	raven_the_poet 216.45.130.159	14-Feb-06/7:21 PM
Thanks, I'll practice a bit with that. I always thought it sounded strange.
Re: a comment on Escape by raven_the_poet	raven_the_poet 216.45.130.159	14-Feb-06/7:20 PM
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Re: a comment on Escape by raven_the_poet	raven_the_poet 216.45.130.159	14-Feb-06/7:18 PM
thanks, he's my buddy.