| Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
15-Feb-06/10:41 AM |
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I truely am honored that you would take your time to write such a kind piece of poetry, as this is, to a heathan like myself. I hope you understand that I will not rate this piece, due to undeniable bias. I will write a poem in responce to this, perhaps not directed to you...but more in explanation of myself. However, it was "His" plan for me to get really drunk alone last night...just like every year, and so I will have to wait until I am less hung-over. Thank you, again, for this =]
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44 |
15-Feb-06/10:07 AM |
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Thank you Dovina. I take this as an honour. Your normal vote on my pages is a -7-.
As for the stronger stuff, this is basically how I pray. Besides, I can't cure myself of some habits, how am I gonna cure someone else's. And 'curing' ain't my fancy. Being adventurous is mine.
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| Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined |
nentwined 68.232.253.122 |
15-Feb-06/9:39 AM |
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I'm down with that. Give me a couple of links for examples and definitions, and I'll make it happen.
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| Re: a comment on Valentine 2 by zodiac |
zodiac 209.193.9.50 |
15-Feb-06/8:38 AM |
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Not news clippings, but a real event - from 1779 and your part of the world. Captain Cook was killed by native knives in Hawaii after his third voyage around the world.
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| Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
zodiac 209.193.9.50 |
15-Feb-06/8:23 AM |
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"3-5-3 (supposedly truer to the informational content of Japanese haiku)."
Is this true? I've always thought the informational content of Japanese was equivalent to, if not actually denser than, English. But then I think, well what about Konichiwa (4 syllables) and Hello (2 syllables)? But then I think, oh, right, I don't really care. Haiku's the rottest poetry form.
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| Re: Recognition by nentwined |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
15-Feb-06/8:22 AM |
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I like it. We need a senryu categoty.
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| Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
15-Feb-06/8:18 AM |
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Hermit sits
Still life, switching view
Red leaves fall
Or something like that?
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| Re: Rhythm of the rain by sanity |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
15-Feb-06/8:16 AM |
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Good, but somehow the last stanza breaks it.
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| Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
Dovina 67.72.98.85 |
15-Feb-06/8:05 AM |
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We often get proponents of religion spouting off about some evil they want to cure, but yours is made of stronger stuff.
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| Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
15-Feb-06/8:05 AM |
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I agree. I am not entirely happy with the second line, in particular the word 'but'.
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| Re: a comment on change (3rd draft) by Adriaan |
Adriaan 198.54.202.18 |
15-Feb-06/8:03 AM |
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Thanks for the comparison :) I am still leery of the word 'but' - it seems that I could use the sylabble to better effect. Any thoughts?
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| Re: a comment on Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy |
Dovina 67.72.98.85 |
15-Feb-06/7:57 AM |
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We oversimplify men's feelings too often. Seldom does one give us the inside story. I want to write about it soon.
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| Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger |
Bobjim 84.9.177.58 |
15-Feb-06/7:10 AM |
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Oooh! Spiritual. But more importantly...
Spiders :)
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| Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44 |
15-Feb-06/7:09 AM |
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Quite different from my usual preference,.... but I like it. Are these news clippings from some real event. I ain't much of a news person, must admit that.
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44 |
15-Feb-06/6:57 AM |
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I'm glad you noticed that, Ranger. I think so too. Thanks for your look up on this poem.
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| Re: Panic by Bobjim |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
15-Feb-06/6:57 AM |
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| Re: Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44 |
15-Feb-06/6:55 AM |
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Hmm not bad. I like the phrases 'soft waters', 'cold boiling ocean', 'blissful abyss', 'die as the suds die'. Things like this make up your poem. About critiquing it, looks like other's have already done so about what came to mind. She's a lucky girl to have someone still dedicate a valentine special to her.
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| Re: a comment on Skating by Bobjim |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
15-Feb-06/6:54 AM |
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That's a five for the poem, and a five for that comment.
Plus I want to see this in the top 10, just for laughs.
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| Re: In the Land of Bob by Bobjim |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
15-Feb-06/6:53 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Pardon my lines by Bobjim |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
15-Feb-06/6:51 AM |
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Here's another one for you then.
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