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Rhythm of the rain (Villanelle) by sanity
Rhythm of the dancing rain Lulling me to sleep On the window pane Pitter patter don't complain Just listen to the deep Rhythm of the dancing rain Gushing water on the plain Watch the spiders creep On the window pane Riding on the fast train Hear the skies weep Rhythm of the dancing rain Matching my numbing pain The raindrops they leap On the window pane Starting now to get mundane Like watching someone sweep Rhythm of the dancing rain On the window pane

Up the ladder: petal soft whispers
Down the ladder: We - Who Work

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Weighted score: 5.1490035
Overall Rank: 5329
Posted: August 8, 2004 9:38 AM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2004 9:38 AM PDT
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[7] Adriaan @ 198.54.202.18 | 15-Feb-06/8:16 AM | Reply
Good, but somehow the last stanza breaks it.
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