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Rhythm of the rain (Villanelle) by sanity

Rhythm of the dancing rain Lulling me to sleep On the window pane Pitter patter don't complain Just listen to the deep Rhythm of the dancing rain Gushing water on the plain Watch the spiders creep On the window pane Riding on the fast train Hear the skies weep Rhythm of the dancing rain Matching my numbing pain The raindrops they leap On the window pane Starting now to get mundane Like watching someone sweep Rhythm of the dancing rain On the window pane

Adriaan 15-Feb-06/8:16 AM
Good, but somehow the last stanza breaks it.




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