Re: No Hitman is a Good Hitman by Spacey	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.157.235	7-Dec-09/3:27 PM
This was fun, but are you purposely messing up the contractions and the singular v/s plural"nobody"? It is distracting.
Re: A List of Names That Should SHUT UP by Tyler J. Mancini	T. Jonathron Remp 70.253.69.92	1-Dec-09/12:09 AM
this poem is DIRT
Re: a comment on To Writing by Lifeboatman	Lifeboatman 216.150.191.2	24-Oct-09/6:12 AM
I know. That's what surprises me. Really, these days, all i make up is crap. But I keep forcing myself to write all this crap. Something switched off some time ago. Just don't know what and don't know when.
Re: skittles by Freethinker1602	INTRANSIT 173.30.210.145	15-Oct-09/11:22 AM
Reword this in a way that eliminates the duplicities. Like -bright colors-- you have more than once. Trust your reader. We've seen skittles. And enjoy them often!
Re: Dovina by Prince of Void	SupremeDreamer 99.183.243.83	15-Oct-09/3:00 AM
Brown-nosing for votes? How sad.
Re: To Writing by Lifeboatman	SupremeDreamer 99.183.243.83	15-Oct-09/2:59 AM
You know this isn't anywhere near as good as you could make it. Four.
Re: Aisling of a Shamed Lady by The Bard	The Bard 72.223.0.211	13-Oct-09/8:30 PM
This is my first attempt at the celtic form of Aisling unique to Ireland. Aisling used an image of a sky woman, Spéirbhean, to describe the agony of Ireland under the English. Using a woman when speaking of Ireland is common, by example the poor old woman, An tSeanbhean Bhocht was the subject of a song of Irish rebellion. I am using the form as I know it to express the pain of my adopted land Venezuela. As the Aisling form morphed into combinations of english and Irish, so I have used Spanish, english and Irish.
Re: knott's berry farm, jam & polaroids by <{Baba^Yaga}>	malpaso 70.233.141.5	13-Oct-09/9:06 AM
gotta say: this poem kicks ass.
Re: Dovina by Prince of Void	Dovina 68.183.152.102	3-Oct-09/5:06 PM
Swoon!
Re: a comment on no title by Dovina	Dovina 68.183.152.102	3-Oct-09/5:04 PM
Good day, fair Prince. Long nights and cold have I endured here in the tower. They no longer pass, those friendly voices, those noble horsemen with whom I consorted in their passing. But now thou hast called to me, and thy words are fresh and comely. How I wish for their return and your staying comfort. For the way it was, I long. And that the void were not so broad.
Re: no title by Dovina	Prince of Void 77.237.86.114	30-Sep-09/2:42 PM
Her words soared and fell down deep inside the blue surface, Then her dreams made it move, Along waves of lights and breeze To embrace The infinity of her beauty That made me a dream of meadows and cornfields in the canvas of her words I will wait under the shade of those words, Till I hear her enchanted voice Till I see her sun rise again Till I talk to her moon to bring her dreams back to my shore
Re: which girl are you? by OMOMOMOM	nentwined 75.83.199.99	15-Sep-09/8:38 PM
eh, cutesy but not really interesting.
Re: Fragrant Love by Engelbert Humpalot	flames777 94.246.126.37	31-Aug-09/3:41 PM
A lingering heart-conviction of a forgotten secret pleasure in spontaneous lines between creative fingers. Nice work.
Re: Lightning in the distance by sliver	vulcan 91.184.88.143	23-Jul-09/11:31 PM
I just Love the last part of the poem..I recognize the feeling..and "watch that lightning in the distance" reminds me of a beautiful french painting called "Mountain Landscape with Lightning" by Francisque Millet which I like very much..Well done..I think the poem can be developed further..the first part doesn't quite prepares you for the final beautiful relaxation you suggest ..but if only for the finale I give you a 9..
Re: The Pledge by izzy shafer	izzy shafer 71.87.105.156	23-Jul-09/7:38 AM
this is totally awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Re: @#%$!&* by izzy shafer	izzy shafer 71.87.105.156	23-Jul-09/7:31 AM
LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Re: Home by izzy shafer	izzy shafer 71.87.105.156	22-Jul-09/9:32 AM
This is a very relaxing poem.
Re: PHOTO by madamefrufru	sliver 209.248.123.49	16-Jul-09/1:28 PM
I can picture her there, in the casket, How sad that you only retained a sliver.
Re: a comment on Getting Burned by sliver	sliver 209.248.123.49	15-Jul-09/8:35 PM
I totally agree, it's rough. I probably wrote it at 2 AM and never cleaned it up, it's funny, I was thinking similar thoughts the other day, maybe I should write a new one and delete this one... or something...
Re: Getting Burned by sliver	madamefrufru 82.132.139.151	15-Jul-09/3:30 PM
I like the idea. No expert here but with some tweaking it could flow better