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Lightning in the distance (Lyric) by sliver
Its simply amazing to me, How many people live their lives BITCHY. I mean, come on.... Seriously? How much longer your day must be than mine, Because you're unhappy all the time. Right? Just step back, BREATH. If you have to, Read some inspirational poetry. Or maybe, just maybe........ Lay yourself down in the shade of a giant elm tree Swinging on a hammock to a soft and gentle breeze, watch that lightning in the distance....

Up the ladder: Resurrection
Down the ladder: A Dream

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.75
Weighted score: 4.970199
Overall Rank: 8434
Posted: July 15, 2009 8:58 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2009 8:58 PM PDT
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[9] vulcan @ 91.184.88.143 | 23-Jul-09/11:31 PM | Reply
I just Love the last part of the poem..I recognize the feeling..and "watch that lightning in the distance" reminds me of a beautiful french painting called "Mountain Landscape with Lightning" by Francisque Millet which I like very much..Well done..I think the poem can be developed further..the first part doesn't quite prepares you for the final beautiful relaxation you suggest ..but if only for the finale I give you a 9..
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