Re: test by zanzina	nentwined 68.232.253.122	17-May-06/1:53 PM
Hmm. Very minimalist. ;)
Re: a comment on Peeping Through The Window by Edna Sweetlove	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	17-May-06/1:02 PM
Well, darn. Sucks to be me.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:54 PM
It's not about the vulgarity of the poem that put me off... it was more like it gave me an impression of Jim Carrey who I totally and wholeheartedly hate. More like a transferrence of feeling.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:49 PM
I should hope not. It started with me and Ranger wondering what anyone would do with 72 Islamic virgins. I mean you could deflower them but then what do you do for the rest of eternity? It's kinda vulgar, I know, but the song it parodies is kinda vulgar. I understand though. This definately isn't your cup of tea.
Re: a comment on Goa by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:47 PM
Either way.... He is the Lord Good!
Re: a comment on A Snap Shot by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:45 PM
Ha ha ha.... thanks Alchemy. That would be nice. If only somebody could help me! It's a wonder they tolerate my stuff here. Ha ha ha... I've made huge posters and stuck it on the walls, and they are forced to look at it. Bet they wd be happy to get rid of me for this reason if nothing else.
Re: a comment on Goa by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:40 PM
That's OK, I'm sure The Lord Good will forgive you :)
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:36 PM
Alchemy, I refrain from voting here. Sorry, this glossa doesn't appeal me. I do not find it touchy or inspiring.
Re: a comment on Goa by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:34 PM
OOOps.... I've been making mistakes again. I mean it's good to hear.
Re: a comment on Goa by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:32 PM
Thanks AL. Hmmmm. So you think it's one ogf my best? That's god to hear. :-). Recently I haven't been writing much and it's nice to see a couple of tens to make up for it. I presume you could say that there was a lot of emotion in what I wrote. I wrote it on MS Word and it has automatic caps each line. I didn't have the patience to check it last night when I wrote it. There's quite a lot of caps unnecessarily. Sorry about that. I may not write for quite a while, and even if I do, I might post more only after I settle down in Cochin, down south 780 km. from Goa.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:28 PM
I imagine they died fairly quickly, (not having a pee or poop hole to discharge urine and feces and all) Most likely from toxic shock.
Re: a comment on Goa by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	17-May-06/12:26 PM
Thanks Dovina. Not very convincing critisism, nonetheless I take it into consideration.
Re: a comment on Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:22 PM
Yeah, "Suds" kinda bugged me too but froth was the only other word I could come up with and that sounded even worse. The blissful abyss line was sort of the image of someone the moment they succumb, arms outstretched, drifting. It seemed to just look rather blissful. I like your suggestion alot although it doesn't quite go with the loose half rhyme scheme I had going. You got me thinking now.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:07 PM
I looking forward to your version too. But school work first, go on now get to work.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/12:02 PM
I know what you mean but I felt I had to stay as true to the song as I could and I mean look at the actual lyrics: http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/jayz/99problems.html Not exactly Shakespeare. Plus I kinda rushed it. Maybe we should do more parodies around here, ya'know lighten the place up a little.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	17-May-06/11:53 AM
I left the other 2 verses for you guys to do. So I look forward to your version of verse 2. Here's the complete lyrics: http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/jayz/99problems.html
Re: a comment on grim task by lmp	lmp 141.154.134.3	17-May-06/11:42 AM
if you dont like the content, fine. but to put a poem in so poor a place purely on personal punctuation preferences is pretty petty. (how's that for alliteration?) to be honest, i do like the British spelling of some words, but it is not intuitive to me. if they were to be changed, how would that affect your impression of the poem? addressing the use of "ev'ry": some may pronounce the word "every" as "ev-er-y", which would have thrown off the rhythm of the reading. to ensure that a two syllable pronunciation was used, thereby preserving the rhythm, i used "ev'ry". which, in actuality, is not archaic at all; to this day, do not ommitted letters in a word call for that punctuation called an apostrophe? whereas punctuation will also help with the phrasing and rhythm of the piece, capitalisation (British spelling for your pleasure) does not - in my opinion - have any bearing. i tend to write without the use of capitals because i prefer to, and this is not without precedent(e e cummings). however, punctuation i do not forgo as it also helps collect certain parts of the written content together. so if you read the poem and have some actual reasons why it is rated with a 2, i would be appreciative should you care to share your thoughts with the rest of us.
Re: Foray by richa	Dovina 17.255.240.138	17-May-06/10:46 AM
"Your brown hair an earthy tone" says a lot.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	Dovina 17.255.240.138	17-May-06/10:42 AM
Those heavenly hoes died and went there for good reason. The rest of us never made it.
Re: a comment on The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	17-May-06/10:26 AM
If he agrees that I have a third grade mentality, it would probably be the greatest compliment he has given me.