Re: Sunday night is Curry night by ==Doylum	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Feb-07/8:49 AM
Genius
Re: a days journey by donmiguel1960	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Feb-07/8:31 AM
What do you mean when you say 'today I've awoken week in spirit'? Is it a typo, or are you making a profound temporal and spiritual claim?
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Feb-07/8:26 AM
You're still alive!
Re: You by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	8-Feb-07/6:06 AM
Some of the best half rhyme I've read here.
Re: She dreams by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	8-Feb-07/5:57 AM
One of the best poems I've read here. He's a very lucky man.
Re: Flowers by Dovina	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	8-Feb-07/5:31 AM
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Re: Flowers by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 61.17.21.37	8-Feb-07/3:10 AM
Am I the only one to understand what you mean with all these flowers... dried or ascii. I'm happy to see this post and it gives me a nostalgic feel although the flowers are yours. Too bad that the string of ascii characters didn't come an angel's way, at least not yet.
Re: Drowning by wilco	amanda_dcosta 61.17.21.37	8-Feb-07/2:59 AM
When do we get to hear this piece of yours. Would love to. I like the style in most of your lyrics.
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:28 AM
wow the spacing on this is really really big.
Re: Pedophile by Lenore	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:28 AM
brave and contradictory.
Re: untitled #2 by venusdemilo	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:27 AM
A really good point, why do people fight over ethnicity. Is it because blacks no longer know their place or because we have become soft?
Re: love cycle by j_beckfield	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:26 AM
I think this is terribly clever, and what's more it rhymes!!!!
Re: Flowers by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:23 AM
I believe it is stretching poetic licence to suggest that flowers could toss a girl. A girl could toss with flowers, a girl could be tossed with flowers, but importantly a flower could not toss a girl. The next two lines read like something out of a wanna-be bridget jones romcom fiction book that's free with this months peoples friend. "But again never comes" is the most bow'ls thing I have ever, ever read.
Re: a comment on Tea,One Night Stands and Smores by Bethy	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/1:28 AM
Ranger dopesn't know how to be nasty he is the very personfication of a -=Light_Angel=-.
Re: Tea,One Night Stands and Smores by Bethy	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:36 AM
A good moving story. Tense conflict - might be best to make it all present tense, but you could just eliminate the few out-of-past-tense verbs. Also, quote marks are inconsistent - I'd use them on all quotes. And spacing - yes, a space after every comma. I like it though.
Re: City Beat by Quarton	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:30 AM
"so" say your prayers. "sycophant"? A good beat and good rhymes, doesn't seem forced.
Re: Stopped Cold by coldiron	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:22 AM
You can, and may have, walked his paths: http://travel.sulekha.com/hampshire/sites.aspx He’s one of the few poets who never fool around, never stick in a silly piece out of boredom, and almost always say at least two worthwhile truths in every line. His writing is dark, or dour as you say, if you wish to see it darkly, or not see the light. I hope only to approach his weight and buoyancy, two forces acting oppositely, where a small nudge makes all the difference. Good reflection.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:06 AM
The first verse should be in italics and set apart as an opening quote or reference. It’s the poem my poor wallflower wrote (yes I wrote it). The rest of it is her unwritten thoughts—a poem written by someone else about her poem and about her.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:04 AM
Welcome back, and keep the flowers, throw out the dates.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:03 AM
Maybe it’s better if he brings a wolf, she’d have something more than dried flowers or a string of ascii characters. The first verse is hers, the rest is the narrator’s. She’s feeling melancholy and writes cliché; yes, you are right.