| Re: Pink BAlls by EAger to Offend |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
22-Apr-07/5:40 PM |
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| Re: Ein Kampf by Sasha |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
22-Apr-07/5:38 PM |
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You need a better, more original approach to this.
That and.. oh yeah, the nazi/holocaust poem is over done to the extreme.
Another thing:
Unless you actually lived and endured that rather grim period as a Jew in Germany, I find all artistic expression dressed thus to be abortive. Horridly fruitless rather...
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| Re: Easter (edited) by thetrev |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
22-Apr-07/5:28 PM |
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morassed--
Were you trying to turn a noun into an adjective? Webster didn't provide a listing, other than for "morass", if that was what you meant. That, or Webster sucks ass.
That aside, I enjoyed it. Nine.
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| Re: a comment on Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
22-Apr-07/5:21 PM |
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Indeed. By the way, do you happen to carry golden floss? I need to edge clean the crack of my ass.
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| Re: Ein Kampf by Sasha |
Dental Panic 84.27.244.4 |
22-Apr-07/3:33 PM |
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better not have kids, then.
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| Re: Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer |
Dental Panic 84.27.244.4 |
22-Apr-07/3:06 PM |
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time for a commercial break.
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| Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT |
thetrev 86.20.231.0 |
22-Apr-07/11:18 AM |
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i don't think you need "jealous". great otherwise.
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| Re: Forbidden by jduzz |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
22-Apr-07/5:37 AM |
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You've got to be kidding. This is some of the most cliché crap I've seen
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| Re: Easter by thetrev |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
22-Apr-07/5:36 AM |
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"Literary" in the worst sense of the word
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| Re: Always there by holliebollie_19 |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
22-Apr-07/5:35 AM |
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| Re: a comment on a days journey by donmiguel1960 |
donmiguel1960 69.120.223.250 |
22-Apr-07/5:25 AM |
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Thanks for the thought, I also like this word.
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| Re: a comment on Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5 |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:23 PM |
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Why not take a day off from being an arsehole?
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| Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5 |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:22 PM |
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Why submit the same poem twice? It's still nasty fascist rubbish.
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| Re: On The Gay Beach by Edna Sweetlove |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:21 PM |
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Kinky stuff - I think I know the place.
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| Re: bimby by sneakerpimp |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:20 PM |
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| Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:18 PM |
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This is very sexy. I have shot my load.
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| Re: a comment on What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
mr cunt 85.210.199.241 |
21-Apr-07/5:18 PM |
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| Re: The Corner Tavern by jessicazee |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
20-Apr-07/10:04 PM |
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It's like mallarmé , but without the musicality and with a damp lyricism.
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| Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
20-Apr-07/10:03 PM |
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You also had poor enough taste to VOTE ON YOUR OWN POEM ANONYMOUSLY.
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| Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
Sasha 128.135.197.101 |
20-Apr-07/10:00 PM |
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You rhymed kiss and bliss. That alone earns you the great award of "cliché." You also refer to bliss as heavenly. This earns the award of "overt cliché." You use absolutely no novel imagery or language or even display the slightest awareness that a poem is a form of artwork.
In other words, this is a bad poem for just about every reason a poem can be bad.
-2- for effort
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