Re: a comment on Win, Win, Lose, Lose by Dovina	Dovina 65.171.117.171	29-Jun-07/1:24 PM
The tweaks are pressed into places like poemranker by the old who keep them out of the controlling positions in the workplace. Okay, I'll work on it.
Re: a comment on Win, Win, Lose, Lose by Dovina	Dovina 65.171.117.171	29-Jun-07/1:23 PM
Oh, it’s new that I’m two-thirds of the way through Kansas with a bouquet of evening primrose guiding my bicycle.
Re: a comment on Win, Win, Lose, Lose by Dovina	Dovina 65.171.117.171	29-Jun-07/1:22 PM
American Dream = to get old, powerful and rich.
Re: a comment on essence of a thought by lmp	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	29-Jun-07/12:18 PM
Sometimes I take a year off to refuel my creativity. I'm wierd that way. I don't know when I'll be kicking it into gear again though.
Re: The Riddle by lexxie100	lmp 141.154.134.3	29-Jun-07/11:20 AM
sobriety anniversary, perhaps, but i do not think so. maybe a bout of mental illness, but minor, like seasonal defective disorder. or maybe just allergies. anyhow, this could be more subtle in the way it is written and the rhyming is too forced, in my opinion. not all poetry needs to have an even meter and rhyme pattern; simple, effective groupings of words often convey a more powerful/clear message.
Re: a comment on a dream by lmp	lmp 141.154.134.3	29-Jun-07/11:01 AM
a fairy tale ending for sure.
Re: a comment on timebomb by lmp	lmp 141.154.134.3	29-Jun-07/10:58 AM
eventually.
Re: a comment on timebomb by lmp	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	29-Jun-07/10:35 AM
Having cancer hurts whether you've excepted its truth or not.
Re: To My Little Known Love by MacFrantic	lexxie100 72.64.228.124	29-Jun-07/10:29 AM
it seems slightly repetitave, and overall sad, but it's something that a lot of people can relate to.
Re: a dream by lmp	lexxie100 72.64.228.124	29-Jun-07/10:26 AM
i enjoy reading it, it definately has a happy feeing to it.
Re: Win, Win, Lose, Lose by Dovina	Prince of Void 80.71.127.195	29-Jun-07/7:42 AM
win,win we die in this victory what we lost in this misery the happiness we lose or win only lose,lose we fall in this failure that we could understand better some lose ,some win so what's american dream ?
Re: a comment on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	Shuushin 63.167.136.250	29-Jun-07/6:02 AM
yes and also; the orange sun is a reference to "Impression: sunrise" (and others using a similar technique) while it is also a nod to the rising influence of being able (through talent and advances in materials) to acheive the groundbreaking results he (and other impressionists) did. It's a, ah - "poetic device".
Re: a comment on Stripes by JMakStak	JMakStak 67.41.154.93	28-Jun-07/11:02 PM
Thank you, scamper.
Re: a comment on Stripes by JMakStak	JMakStak 67.41.154.93	28-Jun-07/10:59 PM
Thank you very much, jess. im trying to make it a song
Re: a comment on timebomb by lmp	Skamper 202.6.129.165	28-Jun-07/4:37 PM
So it's just the act of the lie that hurts - not what is actually said. I get it, It's the nature of the truth that hurts - cancer, cheating - not the act of telling the truth. So, where's the irony? LOL...kidding, I am just dizzy from reading all the twists.
Re: Anthony by lexxie100	Skamper 202.6.129.165	28-Jun-07/4:31 PM
where is the unusual? What is it that defines this couple and their lives as being unusual? The story is not so different to everyone's apart from the fact that it's happening to them -
Re: Teddy Bear by lexxie100	Skamper 202.6.129.165	28-Jun-07/4:26 PM
go do what ALChemy said - you can tell a story, but force it unnaturally into rhyme. Try free versing this - I bet it will surprise you
Re: The Riddle by lexxie100	Skamper 202.6.129.165	28-Jun-07/4:22 PM
If there is a riddle here - I can't get it...Hidden messages in poems work the best when not even hinted at...I find the flow a bit messy too...but you got me curious???
Re: Proposterosity by lexxie100	Skamper 202.6.129.165	28-Jun-07/4:17 PM
you could cut this a bit - drop some of the filler words, tighten it up. Not sure where you are going with it - abuse is the only real image I can get...
Re: a comment on Never Still by Skamper	lmp 141.154.134.3	28-Jun-07/4:11 PM
re-reading some of your work. you are quite the goth girl, eh? i refer also to "little goth girl". google it, relates to the satan/maiden images you have written about, but in a much lighter (but still dark) way.