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Never Still
In the dank and death chilled night
satan nears to claim his right.
Upon her maidens breast he lays,
the anguished hand of loveâs dismay.
And in the weak set of the moon
broods a devil of cruellest gloom,
to capture her from riverâs sand
bare her soul away from land.
The empty depths of Silver River
quietly breaks over fingerâs quiver.
The ragged figure â her lover scorned
sheds bloody tears from roseâs thorn.
Her whispers filter past the skies,
the stars will wink within her sigh,
and devilâs will â she denies,
to etch the light where none was nigh
And love will wander âneath the stars
to feel her breath â to mend his scars,
to heal loveâs victim â âO thy mind
be true to what your heart definedâ
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still cogitating on this one. so far i like it, but want to understand it a bit more.
if the meaning is that she defies the devil's will by haunting her lover to ease his pain, you may want to pull the thoughts together by losing the dash in line 15. a period at the end of line 14 would also help, as would beginning line 15 with "the". line 16 might complete the image a bit by replacing "to etch the light" with "etching the light".
like the dark sentiment; "brood" is one of my favorite dark verbs. still trying to piece together how her lover was scorned exactly, but i can dream up any number of treacheries/betrayals...
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