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Dying (Free verse) by QuirkyWonder
Breathe in The smell of everything around you The air, her hair, her smile, Your happiness, your love, your last breath You won't let it go Because you want to cherish this moment forever By holding in your breath You are extending every second spent with her But you can only hold on for so long Before you have to give into destiny And let go of the smell Of the air, Her hair, her smile Your happiness, your love And most of all your life But in doing so realize That in your last moments You could not have been any happier

Up the ladder: broodmood
Down the ladder: The Better Beggar

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.0794687
Overall Rank: 6426
Posted: May 25, 2004 9:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 25, 2004 9:29 PM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.102 | 19-Jun-04/6:33 AM | Reply
Hi! You know, despite our difference of opinions on opinions, I think your poemes are really good. You should try to get some of them published!
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