MacFrantic
on Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all
3 Aug 2004, 10:21 PM
Hey guys, this poem totally L15 W4s W5. Right guys?! Right?! Haha! I mean, if it was any more L28 W2, I'd feel like a L12 W6. Ha! Haha!
Hey sk8rs! Don't worry about that, it's just a little inside joke, you know?
But seriously, this would suck as a song *5*
Hey guys, this poem totally L15 W4s W5. Right guys?! Right?! Haha! I mean, if it was any more L28 W2, I'd feel like a L12 W6. Ha! Haha!
Hey sk8rs! Don't worry about that, it's just a little inside joke, you know?
But seriously, this would suck as a song *5*
If this is poetry...well... then I am unbelievable in the sack...and we all know where...heh, touchè. *7*
"Spoofing of other users is not permitted."
This is not a spoof. A spoof would be written in the style of ___________(insert poet). This poem is not written in the style of Dovina. It is written in the style of >not Dovina<. Therefore it is just a freaky, jerky elementary school rhyme. It should take its place next to "fat, fat the water rat," "I see Paris. I see France. I see someone's underpants" and so many others in that genre. -5- for showing up and posting.
Great title, rough-sketch poetics. The 12th & 13th lines are tops without the 'Still'up front.
"C.... to s...., c... for s...".
Though the title csught my eye, it does not jive with the poem. Where's the recovery? Looks like death to me.
you are right, it's a bit wordy, i liked the poem that you linked, but thats not my writing style...but i like what it said and how it said it, i don't know how someone gave that a one, maybe it was the old man in my poem...
no it's not an actual observation, unless you call my observations on how people get off the path of self realization and on to the path of bitterness and intolerance and end up going backwards instead of forward...
Fuck you is two words too, isn't it sunshine?
I didn't know you were Greek, are you?
You know how many poems I'v had written
about how much cock and smack I suck? many,
you're not a full fledged member of poemranker until
you're gangraped.
little paranoid are we?
The votes and comments here tell us something, don't they?
lovely
-9-
Good god, you still blowing the water pipe over there with carrie? Does not the buckets of blood slighly staunch the buzz?
Bombastic...11!
Pure brilliance. 10.
typo
thanks for pionting it out
You are absolutely hopeless. Please give up now.
Yeah, I only saw the surface of it, if that's what you meant. Too vague for me.
An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht.
"there were only two bus. . . "