-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on I hate Haiku's. Bombs away. by Rollsoftoiletpaper
16 Oct 2004, 8:21 PM
1. This is not a Haiku, it's a Meta-ku, as you would know if you'd spent more time reading the pop-up help and less time funneling beetles into your cock.
2. Stop posting.
I really, really hate Haiku's. This is my first one ever. Tell me, public, does this Haiku pass as standable?
If only God took time from his "busy" schedule to read. :) I like it.
You could call this one a lyrical too, no? Yea, I'd buy this single.
Hah, I like the title most of all. -9-
I love a good rhyming scheme :)
16. (junior in HS)
But with all the drama, it seems I should be older.
Well I'm glad you got how you were feeling out. Keep your chin up, if that person doesn't realize what a good friend you are, then that's their loss. I know you've probably heard those very same words spoken to you a million times before, but its the truth.
Out of pure curiosity, I'm just wondering how old you are?
Once I woke up to find that a thin old man was pressing his sagging buttocks against my face.
"Who are you?!" I muffledly asked, frantically secreting from my Panic-nozzle.
"Parp!" replied the buttocks.
Dig it.
lol
I would but I don't use instant messengers since this isn't my computer.
I don't have a link...I wrote this at a museum, but I'm sure you could find it if you did a search.
I have not seen the painting, but already think I know how it looks from your vivid description. Could you post a link to it?
Yes, I think that's better, and am even more happy to know that my but is not so big after all.
If her broad smile lightens your load,
be careful, my friend.
She remembers one from long ago.
You are but a substitute.
Maybe.
Smaller is good. Diamonds are small (Even the big ones). B-ig T-houghts in S-mall P-ackages are better than diamonds. I think 'Schisms' is a BTSP. Ergo 'Big.'
Ta.
well yeah, the poem is really focused on humans and God. the frankenstein thing just got my brain working. so whereas the monster wa groteque on the outside and kind on the inside(at least at first) we are the opposite. im me. backwoodnation
i see your point but theres somethings that would be lost in changing of the lines... frigid air conquest is important because birds fly south (signals overhead) when cold air is taking over, and while standing outside theres always a scent of fire coming from somewhere far off. the smell of it always seem to mask that bit of coolness in the air. thats why the refrences to a battle seemed to make sense
I might just end with line 11, might be stronger for being smaller. What's so good about big?