horus8
on For Ike by INTRANSIT
23 Oct 2004, 4:10 PM
Best thing you've ever written.
To sum it up "I existed from all eternity and, behold,
iam here; and i shall exist till the end of time, for my being has no end.
I have to admit the beat got irregular, but I kept the offset lines for what beat there is.
See what I mean.
You're staggered lines threw me. I was expecting a beat that didn't show. 30 Lashes with a soggy file box, and one hail mary over a bowl of fruity pebbles.
It's like a flow chart with only 75% of the boxes filled in. I like it but it's a little too bony.
You're such a dim.
Thank you, that's true, but it's still pleasant to hear. I might add that insults slammed at poets and poetry (I'm speaking of others, not you) form no part of the quality of those people or their work. Calling someone dim, for example, or his poetry shit, has no relevance to useful criticism or evaluation.
I love your poems. keep up the good work, and remember
Whatever is in anyway beautiful has its source of beauity in itself. and complete in itself; praise forms
no parts of it. so it is none the worse nor the better for being praised. when you create this planet let me
know.
If you love something, let it go. If it returns, it's yours. If not, it never was.
From then til now, God has died and dreaming of sex with no hangups is his replacement. And the cow jumped over the moon.
"the nurse who cares and loves.
yet with a swift cut."
"The rock smiles, showing it's jagged teeth."
it's a love = letting go thing.
I love it.
What's the dots? I'm taking its a good thing seeing how you gave me a 9. I'm still curious though.
And if it were, would you still be an atheist?
You made the same comment on my last poem, "A Lovely Cog." The one before that, âTo Leave a Trace,â talks of the written records we leave after our deaths. And before that, âArchivist of Emotion.â By God, youâre right, I am a librarian. Thank you.
It's a riddle. You're a librarian.