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For Ike (Prose Poem) by INTRANSIT
Jesus Ike, It's so hot in St.Louis today. The humidity is smothering me from the inside and it's hard to concentrate with the salt running down my face. If I had been given a choice between you and the other owners, I still would have chosen the man with the silver birch hair heavy with wisdom. I was so jealous of that hair. I wanted to know what you knew. Hindsight hits like a brick to the head. Whenever I had a question you were my ace-in-the-hole, only a phone call away. And I could always count on your rare and random appearances to bring me a message from a distant time like the super black and monolithic american roadways. And if this pain is so so bright like Kansas during the sunflower bloom, how much greater goodness left by your life for so many others to consume? You're such a beautiful asshole for deciding to wear the ivory parchment. Though you've left us, you're still here. Like a cars' annoying crash avoidance warning, or the welcoming keys-in- the-ignition bell letting us know there's still enough battery left to start the engine, again.

Up the ladder: Transmissional Dance
Down the ladder: Da Ghetto

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.0
Overall Rank: 1281
Posted: October 23, 2004 8:36 AM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2004 8:36 AM PDT
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[10] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 23-Oct-04/4:10 PM | Reply
Best thing you've ever written.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.138 > horus8 | 23-Oct-04/4:28 PM | Reply
Thank you.
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 65.45.152.59 | 23-Oct-04/9:05 PM | Reply
Indeed.
[9] sliver @ 63.190.65.77 | 24-Oct-04/7:29 PM | Reply
Sometimes the carbon copy smears, and these are the things we are left with.
It's funny, man, I was listening to the radio when I read this, and they were playing Ace In The Hole, by George Strait...
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.217.93 | 25-Oct-04/10:27 AM | Reply
I liked Ike but not as much as I like your poem.
[10] [mojo] @ 80.58.44.42 | 16-Nov-04/9:46 AM | Reply
Excellent. I was needing a little bit of rhyme and along it came... bang on time. V nice.
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