Dovina
replying on The Way by Dovina
6 Jan 2005, 7:28 PM
Itâs more like not finding it or even looking for it, but waking up to it.
Yep. They can really shove your meat into the freezer when it suits 'em. -8-
"embers softly speaking" then.
It was clear what you meant by downfall, just not clearly shown. Is an affair really a downfall? If so, how or why, or what emotions lead to that conclusion?
I like this
and that's the saddest part.
"tis" has been edited since it was the wrong word to use i suppose. But embers sofly spoken is correct.....what are embers but burning pieces of wood...what noice do they make...crakling. Instead of saying crackling i used softly spoken.
For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in.
Did this clear things up a bit?
Is this kinda like, "I found it in the last place I would a thought to look for it?" I think it's kinda clever in very unbelievable way.
A worthy story, lacking interest because it's too directly told.
"embers softly spoken"???
"Tis love is . . . "???? The rest of this sentence is a lumbering flourish.
The conclusion "Tis the downfall of man." is not supported or led up to.
kindof amazed that there are so many workable rhymes for "for" (I think you forgot "two-dollar whore")
Dandy, yes, and for him that was enough. How similar is it that people hold to astrology, for example, or to luck or the intrinsic "good" of belonging to a social class?
Good lyric, you seem to be very proud of leaving your love, heh.
Dear horus8:
I have always been write, never have I once been wrong.
How dare you say such an awful thing!
Jesus fucking christ.
Why weren't you in Asia instead
of the dingy supermodel
we need more stories like
This! 11!
Should start every line with 'tis'
And just put this poem entirely out
of it's misery instead of dicking around.
Good God man, will you please learn how to fucking write?
Dear Zodiac:
Yes, I am serious! And, of late, I have been whemying off into the moonlight quite often. In fact, I did so only the night before last an had a "major uberfaulty accident." I guess my timing was "a bit off." Kind of a "major midnight explosion" one might say. A real mess no doubt, but that is, no doubt, the risk one must take when whemying in the moonlight.
And yes, it all did occur on a moon light hike that I had organized..... one that was at the time under my supervision....... not to say that it was all very embarrasing..... to say the least!
Doug
Well somebody had to clean up the mess the meatball left behind.
â¢Â°â¢Gregory Jamesâ¢Â°â¢
Dear Zodiac:
Well..... considering that uberfaulty is a "protypical undergroup," that is, a group that has continued to be under-rated (as well as under-valued), the mean must then be protracted by adding to it a mathmatical value that is equal to approximately .287 times the square root of the atypical standard deviation of the group assuming that the group is, of course, in a state of rest. However, if any of the above assumptions are violated, then all bets would be off. So my best guess would be somwhere between 11.932% and 14.617%.
Doug
reminds me of meatball I once knew.
You generated alot of interest in this one, D - nice work.