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Nightmares Of Yesterday (Free verse) by Zalev
Hello memories, did you come back to taunt me? To depress and to haunt me? Haven't you caused enough pain? Stop reminding me how I was the blame. I just had a few beers that day, mom said I was drunk, and that I should stay. I was too stubborn and didn't care, wife and son were both so scared. Damn you memories, why must you make it clear? I see myself now trying to steer. The car came crashing into a spin, please stop the madness, please stop my sin. Oh, memories please go away, I don't want to remember that awful day. My wife and son did not make it, I see them dead I can not take it. I hear their voices crystal clear, I should be dead, should not be here. I don't deserve this meaningless life, not without my son and wife. My body trembles, I'm filled with chills, I will not take these prescribed pills. I will just lay here and waste away, into my nightmares of yesterday. Goodbye memories, tomorrow you will taunt me, you will depress, and forever haunt me.

Up the ladder: I miss you still
Down the ladder: fire

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10261
Posted: January 6, 2005 2:58 PM PST; Last modified: January 6, 2005 3:00 PM PST
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[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 6-Jan-05/5:12 PM | Reply
A worthy story, lacking interest because it's too directly told.
[6] PsydewaysTears @ 69.240.74.35 | 8-Jan-05/2:26 AM | Reply
The title's catchy. And I liked the intro and the final two stanzas... the rest of it though, kinda lost its flare somewhere admidst "mom said I was drunk" and "please stop my sin". Maybe I just wanted to be pulled more into your mind's reactions than just given a dictation of events.... and maybe some metaphorical images to bounce off of would've been nice too. And one of those tiny little umbrellas for my pina colada, if it's not too much trouble.

•°•Gregory James•°•
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