| Re: Colin's thoughts by colin douglas's arse |
Edna Sweetlove 85.211.236.120 |
15-Aug-07/7:59 AM |
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This is hilariously funny! Well wrote, Col, yorra jeany-uss.
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| Re: Colin's thoughts by colin douglas's arse |
Dr Toilet 195.194.75.209 |
15-Aug-07/9:52 AM |
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Hohohohohohohohohohohohohohohoho. I have not laughed so much since my mum caught her tits in the mangle.
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| Re: Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt |
Dr Toilet 195.194.75.209 |
15-Aug-07/9:54 AM |
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Wittier than a pearl necklace.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
SupremeDreamer 72.11.95.174 |
15-Aug-07/8:42 PM |
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Hmm. Eight.
Even though I thoroughly enjoy Bukowskis work.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dr Toilet 82.198.250.11 |
16-Aug-07/9:45 AM |
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Fucking amusing. I crapped me duds twice.
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| Re: On The Gay Beach by Edna Sweetlove |
Dr Toilet 82.198.250.11 |
16-Aug-07/9:46 AM |
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Nothing like a spot of buggery on the sands, but be careful not to get the crabs.
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| Re: The Tale Of Marietta And The Hornbag Priest (v.1) by Edna Sweetlove |
Dr Toilet 82.198.250.11 |
16-Aug-07/9:47 AM |
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Bugger me. That's a good 'n.
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INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204 |
17-Aug-07/5:39 AM |
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Honestly, you're not even funny.
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| Re: Crotchety Old Geezer by Dovina |
pete 62.56.82.209 |
17-Aug-07/6:45 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
nypoet22 65.10.242.119 |
18-Aug-07/10:30 PM |
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i love the last two lines. the first is okay but... thumping what? this might benefit from the "show, don't tell" paradigm.
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| Re: Alfredo by Caducus |
nypoet22 65.10.242.119 |
18-Aug-07/10:40 PM |
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I'm guessing this is a WWII poem, but that's just a guess. This feels like an incomplete story. As such, it's okay to force your readers to infer some things, but I would like some more sensory detail to give a better clue as to the identities of the participants.
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nypoet22 65.10.242.119 |
18-Aug-07/10:47 PM |
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I want some liner notes to this. T.S. Eliot? Beuller?
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Skamper 58.171.0.233 |
19-Aug-07/4:36 AM |
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I have to agree with nypoet - the first line is a little awkward, the last two need the leadup to be as visually stunning as they are.
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| Re: Stuck in Re-Verse by Alex Green |
Skamper 58.171.41.194 |
19-Aug-07/4:46 AM |
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go to the music shop and find some Cake, take it home, listen to it...sigh...
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| Re: Sunset Beach by amanda_dcosta |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
19-Aug-07/6:18 AM |
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Nice flow and rhythm Amanda. You paint a perfect picture as the first line suggests. Very nice work.
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| Re: Stuck in Re-Verse by Alex Green |
MacFrantic 129.82.31.17 |
20-Aug-07/11:00 AM |
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If only these douchebags could hear you sing, Mel.
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| Re: G-d and My Guitar by nypoet22 |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
20-Aug-07/3:44 PM |
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It's hard to judge lyrics without music, but you do have some fine lines here.
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| Re: Alfredo by Caducus |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
20-Aug-07/4:05 PM |
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Wow! This is really left open to interpretation. My guess is the calomine ghost suffers from alzheimer's.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
pete 62.56.123.206 |
21-Aug-07/7:18 AM |
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what is this about
i'm totally senrued out
shouts....and grabs his throat!
aaaaarrgghhh ...... 7points
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Dan garcia-Black 67.150.175.47 |
21-Aug-07/11:52 AM |
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Why should you give a fuck about Hank? Or, for that matter, Ginsberg, Frost, Sandberg and Homer? They own the past. You should own the future.
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