puh..leeze

i don't get the last line either, but like you said it makes since to you, and thats all that really matters in actuality. i like how i can read it smoothly without to much rhyming and not to little, but i don't like rhyming words like smile and mile, but thats all up to you, i just stick with more of the vowels sounding out the same at the end of lines, or sometimes without.

reminds me of sex, maybe? a little brutal ;)

maybe change thunder to rumble, that rhymes to simple, stick with the vowels they drag it out better, ya know?

One of your best.

yeah, chirp is great. Sounds like Bush talkin' bout Yurp.

I really cannot see this is very good and I dislike the excessive use of exclamation marks.

That he does. That he does.

Better than the other boss/employee poem.

Good one, Engelbert.

snort chuckle 'blows nose' tosses tissue

Straightener and placaten'er is a stunning rhyme. The rest is a bit ordinary though. The last 2 stanzas need to go down the toilet.

This is hilariously funny! Well wrote, Col, yorra jeany-uss.

Hohohohohohohohohohohohohohohoho. I have not laughed so much since my mum caught her tits in the mangle.

Wittier than a pearl necklace.

Hmm. Eight. Even though I thoroughly enjoy Bukowskis work.

Fucking amusing. I crapped me duds twice.

Nothing like a spot of buggery on the sands, but be careful not to get the crabs.

Bugger me. That's a good 'n.

Honestly, you're not even funny.