Cut out the adjectives and see what it gives. Alternately, toss out the dictionary.

Very clever how in every second stanza the rhyme isn't true.

This one seems to get alot of hits but no comments. Strange?

Focused poetry and its so good to see quality time results in quality with your work

How shit is this 2 comments on a rare form of poetry. Ed this is awesome the end in particular. bet the next person to comment mentions a prawne or takes the piss.

I like flowers ;) Excellent poem. You obviously have more talent then me-- but that isn't new news! 10/10

Great poem Sliver...........just like the one before this one, and the one before that..and the one before that...ALL OF THEM are great So I think I'll shall give you ( though it is hard to decide)...Of course, 10/10 :) :) :) :)

It's hard to know if you're making fun of this meeting-God-and-answering-to-him stuff or if you're literal. If you're really preaching, then get rid of the cliches and state your case in plain English. No vote until I know which.

Here you are again with anoyher f******n 0 on my poetry? I don't make five suedonimmmes of myself to give you hateful scores. WHY?>

I'll red it letter

I'm just curious as to whether or not you ever put music to your lyrics. Not a bad one, btw.

I'm glad to see you writing again. I wish you'd spend as much time writing as you do attempting to make Poemranker newbies feel bad about themselves. You're not half bad, is what I'm trying to say.

one step forward, two steps back? Now, where have i heard THAT before?

i had intended to rank this poem on its merits, but then I read the comments. adverb indeed. -0-

This "darkangel" is a literary genius. Leave him alone. He's clearly a bummer with no friends. Apart from his poetry. Which is incredible and should be published. I assume you draw on some of the poetic greats of years gone by. If Byron were alive today, I truly believe that he would be tackling these very issues.

Ha ha, you got banned. Naturally, I said it was all YOUR fault.

What makes you think you can slither away without a word, and come waltzing back a month later without so much as a flimsy explanation. I'm melted by "special thanks" though and can only say, Welcome Back. This is a very funny take-off on "A Better God" and also quite profound if you want to open discussions on whether such a god exists, and if so, whether he sends hurricanes, earhtquakes and plagues in anger. Your last two lines pretty well sum up where such discussions end.

What are the chances tha yours and Horus8's houses both burned down and are posted as poems on the same day? Wonder...

A house is a house is a house, An ended thing an' black. But why not "and" and "B"?

But your possibilities will be so much wider if you're NOT following God's rules. Just think: for starters, you'll be allowed to vary the positions.