| Re: GENTLE JANE by titan69 |
Skamper 58.171.148.172 |
19-Nov-07/7:45 PM |
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this could have been funny...nah...who am I kidding, it's god awful
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| Re: What bianca saw!!! by titan69 |
Skamper 58.171.189.55 |
19-Nov-07/7:48 PM |
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argh! get the sylable count right - if you are going to write in limerick, find the rhythm...
snaps for the ranker/wanker rhyme
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| Re: What the fuck is a HAIKU anyway? by titan69 |
Skamper 58.171.198.40 |
19-Nov-07/7:51 PM |
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drop the yoda instructions - add 'a' between writes and load...
you definately have a way with....titles...
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| Re: A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
20-Nov-07/8:02 AM |
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Cyclamatic ? Wow. There's a word. Say, is it just me, or do I rely way too much on images to do my speaking for me?
This is really good Skamper. Not sure about that -maybe-.
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| Re: this is what I see by malpaso |
titan69 82.38.69.75 |
20-Nov-07/1:47 PM |
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| Re: A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
21-Nov-07/6:18 AM |
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This reminds me of one I wrote where a woman gives back an engagement ring. And his rib.
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| Re: Sisters of mercy by titan69 |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
21-Nov-07/6:22 AM |
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your stile? that much is right.
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| Re: WASTED by titan69 |
malpaso 70.233.136.151 |
21-Nov-07/5:22 PM |
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| Re: Bottle collection by INTRANSIT |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
22-Nov-07/5:20 AM |
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I like this INTRANSIT. you have taken something innocuous and gven it life-- "A june-bug scotch drunk" is a great line. Good work. BTW, it seems like you and skamper are the only ones to comment and vote on this site anymore. Whats up with that?
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| Re: A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
22-Nov-07/5:25 AM |
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Great stuff skamper--the first stanza really sets the tone for the rest of the poem. Nice work.
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| Re: Tingling by INTRANSIT |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
22-Nov-07/5:35 AM |
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The imagery in this poem is fabulous--which is no surprise coming from you--imagery is something you seem to have mastered quite well.
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| Re: Heroes to the End by sliver |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
22-Nov-07/12:41 PM |
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Technically, L-11 each day with loss
L-12 -that's hard to justify.
Otherwise, Amen
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| Re: Death and the black dog by Caducus |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
22-Nov-07/12:45 PM |
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I sense expectation of death in the first two stanzas. Um, I'm not going to comment just yet. I think there's more you want to say. Let it ferment, C.
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| Re: What ever happend to Kelly Green? by titan69 |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
22-Nov-07/12:47 PM |
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True story or not, put your back into it, man. This is an easy 9. But not yet.
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| Re: Bottle collection by INTRANSIT |
Skamper 58.171.77.172 |
22-Nov-07/1:05 PM |
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I've just finished a book where the husband was a bottle collector - he had loads of them, proudly displayed and affectionately restored...at the end of the book the wife smashed every one of them. Not that this has anything to do with your poem, apart from coincidence to me...
This poem is perfect in it's quiet way, love it.
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Skamper 58.171.44.134 |
22-Nov-07/1:14 PM |
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| Re: A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper |
malpaso 70.233.136.151 |
22-Nov-07/1:22 PM |
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I would hate to be the one on the other end of THAT laser. Hey is this website in the UK?
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| Re: The Dung Beetles by Pappa |
Pappa 217.36.207.130 |
23-Nov-07/2:59 AM |
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This is actually an Englyn, not free verse.
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| Re: The Dung Beetles by Pappa |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
23-Nov-07/12:57 PM |
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Ok. So I'm making a connection between dung beetles and humans, but not much else. What is the technical description of an Englyn? Welcome to Das 'Ranker!
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| Re: Stringed by thetrev |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
23-Nov-07/12:58 PM |
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