This is a totally fabbo poem. I think you should post it at another website I sometimes go to: http://poetryaddicts.pcriot.com/forum/ - it would be much loved there as indeed would you; you would be much appreciated there.....

This is a lovely poem. I think you should post it at another website I sometimes go to: http://poetryaddicts.pcriot.com/forum/ - it would be much loved there as indeed would you.....

Lesbian manhater poetry? What utter rubbish. You smell like someones embrowned poop deck.

You are not fit to breathe. The only website where the horsedung you excrete might be found amusing is http://poetryaddicts.pcriot.com/forum where everyone else is also a total cunt.

excellent picture of the inside-outside dichotomy of the public's obsession with beauty, fame, and personality---lohan is a public creation: image over substance every time. good work!!

Do your twat really smells bad???

I dig this. But check your punctuation...i.e. "I'll (line 11), it's (13), that's (14), it's (16), etc., and a few typos ("all the little things that I made me leave"). Dang, I'm a nitpicky editor monster now, but I only take the time because with some editing you've got something here. 8.

Sticky thud/hammer stuns. Totally.

Make it less about you (i.e. "I") and let someone else dance to a cosmic beat. Love it. 9.

"red rain dress" is a wonderment, maybe like me, you just walk a lot and get wet. "worm elastic" is cute. That hat wont help against rain. S4 is strange, and strangely punctuated. S5 pulls it together, except the tag is again, strange.

ok, nice rhythm, ok rhyme. What's the point?

[10] as anonymous. I was having a hard day at the office and when I came to poetry ranker, this was the random poem that it threw at me. Every line resonated within. Dont know why :)

i like the poem, good images, don't really see what it's saying though, thematically, maybe i'm just not trying hard enough.

there could be something good here, maybe a couple more stanzas would help to flush it out.

i like "of all things arms can do with grace" a lot. the rest of the song, eh. maybe i just need to hear it.

I like it a lot. But I don't get why the denial will help the character sleep.

good effort, seems a little disjunctive though. i'm tuned out by some of the cliche words "agony", "inferno", "illicit desire". i like lines 4-9. maybe go into why you lie, sign, can't cry though instead of just saying it. paint the picture so the audience understands, otherwise it's something people can't connect to. i suggest getting some sort of modern anthology on poetry, read it, repeat. i think the goal is that you want the audience to feel something that touches them through a descriptive story of pretty words.

any song that starts with lord oh lord and i tune out immediately. and if he is toiling until his fingers bleed, shouldn't that mean the days are as long as the nights?

instead of writing a poorly drafted suicide note, why not write about the story behind what when wrong, that would be 100 times more interesting.

what the heck happened to this site? it's like a freaking ghost town?! was there some horrible accident in my three year absence?!