| regarding some deleted poem... |
aliena 131.107.0.105 |
11-Mar-08/5:22 PM |
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[10] as anonymous. I was having a hard day at the office and when I came to poetry ranker, this was the random poem that it threw at me. Every line resonated within. Dont know why :)
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| Re: The Things We Wear by jessicazee |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:21 AM |
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i like the poem, good images, don't really see what it's saying though, thematically, maybe i'm just not trying hard enough.
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| Re: Light show by winniss |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:22 AM |
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there could be something good here, maybe a couple more stanzas would help to flush it out.
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| Re: Goodnight by Nepanthe |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:24 AM |
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i like "of all things arms can do with grace" a lot. the rest of the song, eh. maybe i just need to hear it.
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| Re: Radio Scan by Blindproject217 |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:28 AM |
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I like it a lot. But I don't get why the denial will help the character sleep.
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| Re: Waiting to fall by aliena |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:34 AM |
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good effort, seems a little disjunctive though. i'm tuned out by some of the cliche words "agony", "inferno", "illicit desire". i like lines 4-9. maybe go into why you lie, sign, can't cry though instead of just saying it. paint the picture so the audience understands, otherwise it's something people can't connect to. i suggest getting some sort of modern anthology on poetry, read it, repeat. i think the goal is that you want the audience to feel something that touches them through a descriptive story of pretty words.
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| Re: Deep Midnight Blues by oneglove |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:37 AM |
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any song that starts with lord oh lord and i tune out immediately. and if he is toiling until his fingers bleed, shouldn't that mean the days are as long as the nights?
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| Re: HATE ME, LOVE by alvinb |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
12-Mar-08/1:42 AM |
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instead of writing a poorly drafted suicide note, why not write about the story behind what when wrong, that would be 100 times more interesting.
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| Re: Rancor by Dovina |
Dark Angle 68.96.82.200 |
17-Mar-08/12:25 AM |
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what the heck happened to this site? it's like a freaking ghost town?! was there some horrible accident in my three year absence?!
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| Re: Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer |
Edna Sweetlove 85.211.254.226 |
18-Mar-08/9:43 AM |
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I would just like to say what a great poem this is. But then I would be a liar. It's horse spunk.
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| Re: Plume Gateau by Bobjim |
some deleted user 78.150.154.124 |
19-Mar-08/5:19 PM |
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This reminds of a style I've seen before, by the guy who wrote these;
Plume Gateau
Shouting at Dogs
Naylor's handbag
Brand new blue book jacket
Teaching beetles to swim
The Kid
Pet Hatreds
Shoe hole
Down on Dogs
Pelted with stones on the common
Oddly enough, you seem to have written the mas well, although somewhat after the creation of these timeless classics, how could that be? Oh I know, cos you're a loser.
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| Re: Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/3:59 AM |
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Bobjim will have claimed to have written that poem, watch out
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| Re: Pelted with stones on the common by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:01 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: Down on Dogs by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:02 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
And admitting you've copied it makes you seem a little odd
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| Re: Shoe Hole by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:03 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: Pet Hatreds by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:04 AM |
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I don't think you gave it very much effort in the first place
This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: The Kid by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:18 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: Teaching Beetles To Swim by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:19 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: Brand-new Blue Book Jacket by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:21 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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| Re: Naylor's Handbag by Bobjim |
some deleted user 81.149.77.93 |
20-Mar-08/4:21 AM |
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This poem was written by Robert Rankin. You've just copied it you fraud
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