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Absurd Robot (Lyric) by Nepanthe I am self actualizing,
each of my steps are exacting,
mine is a limited pace,
in which I know my place.
I am calculating,
each of the problems I'm facing,
straight lines from here to there,
somehow I ended up where- I began.
A flaw with this twisting,
world ever changing,
or is it with me,
deep in my circuitry.
I was walking,
but I see I am dancing,
to a cosmic beat,
underneath my feet.
I am dancing,
to a cosmic pulsating,
straight lines, I missed a link,
I am incomplete.
To end so close to understanding,
troubling, frustrating,
I have missed a vital link,
I find myself incomplete.
Incomplete, Incomplete, Incomplete, Obsolete.
Up the ladder:
the only thing worse than living (revised, liberated)
Down the ladder:
Past thoughts
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 8.5
Posted: February 25, 2008 6:55 AM PST; Last modified: February 25, 2008 6:55 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.1659904 Overall Rank: 5086 Comments:
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Edna Sweetlove @ 85.211.243.133
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25-Feb-08/6:30 PM
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This is a lovely poem. I think you should post it at another website I sometimes go to: http://poetryaddicts.pcriot.com/forum/ - it would be much loved there as indeed would you.....
Make it less about you (i.e. "I") and let someone else dance to a cosmic beat. Love it. 9.
You are self actualizing, each of your steps are exacting, yours is a limited pace in which you know your place. I can mean anyone can't it? Except the people that the words don't apply to. By saying I, I do not distract the listener from my presence which would make them more aware of me, I is easier to empathize with as it is all of our positions in life.
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