poodietat
on some deleted poem
15 Mar 2005, 9:56 AM
Superb imagery.
Superb imagery.
How could an omnipotent, omniscient being make a mastake? Two words: Free Willy.
Would you like to live in a boothe?
This is a bulging turnip.
"Frankly I'd rather fair my chances among men." What could this mean?
their?
"their are two testaments." Please pick out the egregious crime against language contained this phrase.
clearly "testaments" should be "testicles"
A G Q X R Z T G G W T
s i q x u g g w w a a
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There might be a pony in here somewhere, but mainly it's just shit. This concept holds promise:
then watch the eleven oâclock news.
Sometimes I imagine Iâm just
watching another Really Bad SNL,
"a victory lost to a bittersweet -- defeat."
I'm not sure what the victory would have been. As I read it, the poem is solely about defeat.
The past is dirtier and quite a bit more smelly; the future has flying cars and onepiece spandex suits for everybody.
Please stop posting all your awful poems at the same time.
Please stop posting all your awful poems at the same time.
Contrary to popular belief, inter-cousin or inter-sibling marriages pose negligible additional risk for the offspring over one generation.
The most untrue part of this is "didn't remember how good it felt". It probably didn't.
This is crap jock fantasy. Surprising considering the source.
PS-When did you realize it was all going wrong? Was it when he ruptured Ms Dupree's bag of waters with his teeth for a bizarre party gag?
One of my favorites by you. Right up there with Temporal, imho
I think this is poetic and potentially potent.
Substitutionary is funny. Dyn-O-MITE!