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Delusions Of A Peaceful Place (Free verse) by Stacy Stewart
Echos of rambling outsiders arms wide open; a hush of silence plagues us. While we rest on an old dirty couch chasing the dragon. Our minds filled with clatter delusions of a peaceful place. Blood trickling down, the dirty syringe passed with no saint hood of rejecting the feelings. We tremble, I yearn for more Mesmerized with a glassy, waxed over stare. Dancing nostrils flare to the perfect scintillating anticipation. Delicious purge; surging through my skin, falling...falling... to a shrewd world, underlying a victory lost to a bittersweet defeat.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8333335
Weighted score: 5.493059
Overall Rank: 2805
Posted: March 13, 2005 7:35 AM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2005 11:33 AM PST
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Comments:
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.10.229 | 14-Mar-05/6:47 AM | Reply
I can imagine it. Good title.
[8] edpeterson @ 68.79.58.164 | 15-Mar-05/9:02 AM | Reply
I think this is poetic and potentially potent.
[8] poodietat @ 68.51.106.137 | 15-Mar-05/10:01 AM | Reply
"a victory lost to a bittersweet -- defeat."

I'm not sure what the victory would have been. As I read it, the poem is solely about defeat.
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.33.97 > poodietat | 16-Mar-05/6:54 AM | Reply
A bad trip, a delusion, a hoped-for victory lost.
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