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Dovina on Ambition by Billy Fights 7 Apr 2005, 12:40 PM
No very well put together, not clear, chiches, and the repetition doesn't help.
thepinkbunnyofdoom on some deleted poem 7 Apr 2005, 1:28 AM
"Tenderness in your touch, love in your eyes, You are tranquil, wistful, and wise, I want to dwell inside your mind, consume your every thought," -10-.
Dovina on some deleted poem 7 Apr 2005, 12:45 PM
It has meter and all that poetic appropriatness, but the thought train feels too familiar.
some deleted user on Down on Dogs by Bobjim 7 Apr 2005, 2:34 AM
This is a great poem, however it is not your poem. It was written by Robert Rankin, and from memory it appears in his book "A Dog Called Demolition." Its an excellent book, and I notice that Bobjim has nicked a whole host of poems from there. FRAUD!
Plaidypus on famous by crooked_smile 6 Apr 2005, 10:41 PM
Jack Handy, look out....
sliver on Arab Shepherd (a belief poem for Dovina) by zodiac 6 Apr 2005, 10:42 PM
And yet still you stand.
thepinkbunnyofdoom on Mixtapes (or We Always End Where We Began) by philn 7 Apr 2005, 1:24 AM
The 1st stanza after side b, sucked. Other than that, I can't really place what I don't like about it. -6-
Dovina on No Worries by Dovina 7 Apr 2005, 12:20 PM
May I suggest that this page has become tangled with long threads entwining of comments. If anyone wishes to continue any of these discussions, perhaps they should do so on one my other poems.
Dovina on Front Range Toll Road by sliver 7 Apr 2005, 12:26 PM
You are at your best when you do the buffalo and asphalt. When you do the political "without delay" just to rhyme with "play," well, stick with the buffalo.
Dovina on ceiling by not_a_philosopher 7 Apr 2005, 12:29 PM
The last verse doesn't fit - it would have to deal with shame to fit. then -> than.
zodiac on Hard Rock by Dovina 7 Apr 2005, 6:22 AM
I used to think "Jesus, how lucky I was to have been born in America in the twentieth century and not in Africa, the Dark Ages, or outer space!" Then I realized what a stupid thing it was to say that.
zodiac on Church of Puerto Vallarta by James Rykelangeli 7 Apr 2005, 6:35 AM
Consider making more, shorter sentences.
Dovina on March by the_poetess 7 Apr 2005, 12:31 PM
Nobodies are sad. You probably didn't mean that, but it's good.
Dovina on famous by crooked_smile 7 Apr 2005, 12:33 PM
and a hell of a time trying to decipher your words. You have too many of them here and no very well put together.
Dovina on some deleted poem 7 Apr 2005, 12:37 PM
You've got some good thoughts here and a few good lines: "Seeing memories of sight" "For the fear it redeems" Wish it were all that good.
philn on Mixtapes (or We Always End Where We Began) by philn 7 Apr 2005, 2:47 PM
I actually was deliberately trying to make that stanza sound somewhat bad. Each stanza is suppose to be a part of the mix tape and/or a commentary. That was supposed to be representative of the "hackneyed ballads" that are honest, but somewhat pathetic. I probably could have made that clearer.
edpeterson on Hard Rock by Dovina 7 Apr 2005, 3:08 PM
Please wipe, or otherwise de-guff, your hooves before clopping onto the ranker.
edpeterson on Prayer For The Church by sliver 7 Apr 2005, 3:14 PM
I giant, malodorous dumpling, the likes of which I have rarely seen. It is marvelous.
thepinkbunnyofdoom on Mixed Messages by Miggy 8 Apr 2005, 2:47 AM
S2 L1 Thought?
thepinkbunnyofdoom on Hard Rock by Dovina 8 Apr 2005, 2:51 AM
Good title. Not what I was expecting, but good none the less.