Re: famous by crooked_smile	Plaidypus 68.227.185.82	6-Apr-05/10:41 PM
Jack Handy, look out....
Re: Arab Shepherd (a belief poem for Dovina) by zodiac	sliver 64.12.116.135	6-Apr-05/10:42 PM
And yet still you stand.
Re: Mixtapes (or We Always End Where We Began) by philn	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.166	7-Apr-05/1:24 AM
The 1st stanza after side b, sucked. Other than that, I can't really place what I don't like about it. -6-
regarding some deleted poem...	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.166	7-Apr-05/1:28 AM
"Tenderness in your touch, love in your eyes, You are tranquil, wistful, and wise, I want to dwell inside your mind, consume your every thought," -10-.
Re: Down on Dogs by Bobjim	some deleted user 217.37.170.17	7-Apr-05/2:34 AM
This is a great poem, however it is not your poem. It was written by Robert Rankin, and from memory it appears in his book "A Dog Called Demolition." Its an excellent book, and I notice that Bobjim has nicked a whole host of poems from there. FRAUD!
Re: Hard Rock by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.212	7-Apr-05/6:22 AM
I used to think "Jesus, how lucky I was to have been born in America in the twentieth century and not in Africa, the Dark Ages, or outer space!" Then I realized what a stupid thing it was to say that.
Re: Church of Puerto Vallarta by James Rykelangeli	zodiac 212.118.19.212	7-Apr-05/6:35 AM
Consider making more, shorter sentences.
Re: No Worries by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:20 PM
May I suggest that this page has become tangled with long threads entwining of comments. If anyone wishes to continue any of these discussions, perhaps they should do so on one my other poems.
Re: Front Range Toll Road by sliver	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:26 PM
You are at your best when you do the buffalo and asphalt. When you do the political "without delay" just to rhyme with "play," well, stick with the buffalo.
Re: ceiling by not_a_philosopher	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:29 PM
The last verse doesn't fit - it would have to deal with shame to fit. then -> than.
Re: March by the_poetess	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:31 PM
Nobodies are sad. You probably didn't mean that, but it's good.
Re: famous by crooked_smile	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:33 PM
and a hell of a time trying to decipher your words. You have too many of them here and no very well put together.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:37 PM
You've got some good thoughts here and a few good lines: "Seeing memories of sight" "For the fear it redeems" Wish it were all that good.
Re: Ambition by Billy Fights	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:40 PM
No very well put together, not clear, chiches, and the repetition doesn't help.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.8.237	7-Apr-05/12:45 PM
It has meter and all that poetic appropriatness, but the thought train feels too familiar.
Re: Mixtapes (or We Always End Where We Began) by philn	philn 64.12.116.135	7-Apr-05/2:47 PM
I actually was deliberately trying to make that stanza sound somewhat bad. Each stanza is suppose to be a part of the mix tape and/or a commentary. That was supposed to be representative of the "hackneyed ballads" that are honest, but somewhat pathetic. I probably could have made that clearer.
Re: Hard Rock by Dovina	edpeterson 68.252.103.203	7-Apr-05/3:08 PM
Please wipe, or otherwise de-guff, your hooves before clopping onto the ranker.
Re: Prayer For The Church by sliver	edpeterson 68.252.103.203	7-Apr-05/3:14 PM
I giant, malodorous dumpling, the likes of which I have rarely seen. It is marvelous.
Re: Mixed Messages by Miggy	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.160	8-Apr-05/2:47 AM
S2 L1 Thought?
Re: Hard Rock by Dovina	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.160	8-Apr-05/2:51 AM
Good title. Not what I was expecting, but good none the less.